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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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(I tried something... uh... different.  I was really bored, and Biology homework was not an option. So somehow I got the idea to take a deck of cards, flip through them in a random order, and write a series of senryus, using each card's number and suit in its respective stanza and in that order. You'll get the idea.  It was fun! Try it sometime.)Six black, jagged spades taunt the sorrows at the skin as they penetrate Ten more rusty spades crush'd the bone that cowered deep as it tried to sleep Solitary man the ace member of his club down the dim lamplight Dreaming of the past Of his queen that he had lost decked out in diamonds Dreaming of the spades Hurled by his beloved queen Deep into his soul Ravaging the heart Five small droplets hit the ground From its emptiness Nine more spades were hurled Mercilessly, as he lay daring not to stray Joker turned face up In the game of solitaire These should be removed Solitary man All the diamonds in the land Makes him not a king To honour his heart Shuffling six more times, he cries To his bed of cards [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-16-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Allan - this is wonderful! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Allan, I thought this one was awesome. VERY VERY VERY creative and VERY well written. bravo!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Such poetry inspired by a card game! Your talent blows me away, my friend. Great job!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Allan~ What a creative mind ! Brilliantly played hand ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very creative.. wow.. i could never come up with something like this. VERY nicely done! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
as every1 said.. this was really creative and a great poem... keep writing  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
How original! ^_^ I love your idea! Oh Well done Allan.. I love reading such creativity.. LC "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I have only ever played Solitaire on the computer so writing on the screen is probably a bad idea, whoever I really enjoyed your orginal verse. Nice idea it produced a really good poem. "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully creative Allan! This was terrific idea, I really enjoyed them all!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was really awesome allan. Very original. REgina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow Allan your creativeness astounds me, great job on the senyru's Zu |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
nice one Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a very creative way to write a poem. It was also a very nice poem. Great job! *Amanda* |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
COOl |
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