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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-05-19 03:22 PM



The last storm to move through
Was simply too much for the old limb
That had been hanging
Half broken but in cling
Since the ice scales of that
Late winter dragon
Stormed through.

With some sadness
I looped a chain round the end drooping
And tied the other to the back of the old Scout.

Twenty five feet above my head
I noticed a squirrel watching me,
With accusatory eyes it seemed,
That I would be about to rip
The last remaining hold from the tree
Removing one more part of his world.

I shrugged and dropped it in low,
Listened to the sickening crack and tear
As it ripped loose
Then the thud as it hit rain soaked soil.

I wondered at the times I had felt those sounds
Inside myself…
And at the things torn in same not so gentle fashion
From my heart

With watering eyes
I drove slowly
Knowing once things bear too much weight
That is not their own
They break

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2003-05-19 04:09 PM


I shrugged and dropped it in low,
Listened to the sickening crack and tear
As it ripped loose
Then the thud as it hit rain soaked soil.

I wondered at the times I had felt those sounds
Inside myself…

And at the things torn in same not so gentle fashion
From my heart

With watering eyes
I drove slowly
Knowing once things bear too much weight
That is not their own
They break

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dang you....I walk all the way over here to read ya and ya make me cry?

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2003-05-19 09:02 PM


Ah..but sir how much better for all of us if we could cart away the broken parts of ourselves and toss them away. Too many times we cling to those old branches only to find that they crash down on their own and cause more destruction.

Enjoyed this slice of life - and I hope the squirrel found a new home.

Duncan
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3 posted 2003-05-19 10:33 PM


'Listened to the sickening crack and tear
As it ripped loose
Then the thud as it hit rain soaked soil.'

Think maybe if I mowed the grass, I'd find this kind of inspiration?  Nah, probably not.  I'll just have a beer and watch from the porch instead!  

Local Parasite
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4 posted 2003-05-20 11:45 AM


Oh yeah... I really like this one, Ron.  This is the kind of subject matter that I really like to see in poetry, this kind of allegory, I really like...

I think it would be more powerful without the second last stanza... I think it reveals too much about the meaning.  That's just my opinion though.  Love your description of the scene, the string of events... a real treat for the imagination.

Lovely work...

Parasite

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

Sven
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5 posted 2003-05-20 12:28 PM


I've already tied mine up. . .

great work here Sir. . .

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