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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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0 posted 2003-05-01 04:35 PM

Holidays With Hitler.

Sunshine and smiles
     absentee’s
        at this Prisoner of war camp
on the stormy seaside

     the buildings wear
the grey gloomy uniform
    of the wehrmacht
  it’s well worn
     but no colour
shows through

     mother and father
   report me
     disown me
I’m cast into ball pools
   and made to sing songs

I sulk out the hours
    miserable
defiant
awaiting
  the weekend
         liberation.

I don't know why I wrote this, or rather I'm not sure why it ended the way it did, it's certainly not the same as the original draft.

even kittens can kill

[This message has been edited by Marshalzu (05-02-2003 07:02 PM).]

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

1 posted 2003-05-01 09:04 PM

This is an interesting piece and one that gave me an odd tinge of sadness. I suppose that could be because of the subject matter, but it was deeper too... Maybe I'm just getting too emotional over this piece.

I'll add it to my library for sure.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
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Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2003-05-03 02:45 PM

This struck a lot of memory in me, too... memories of holidays coming around and suddenly making everything seem alright. I like your image of the prisoner of war camp, it's a bit of an exaggeration but nonetheless expresses the restriction and stress of the days surrounding holidays...

You're right... it's almost deceptive, the way in which we celebrate. I like this very much, Zu... probably one of my favourites of yours.

Parasite

God becomes as
we are that we
may be as he
is
~William Blake

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2003-08-10 05:04 PM

I sulk out the hours
    miserable
defiant
awaiting
  the weekend
         liberation.

AHhhhhhh summertime, loved the sulking out the hours, nicely put. I remember my moody teenage holiday mardiness. I was horrendus.

I sometimes refer back to it, every now n then, but when you're put thru such torture, what can ya do.

in all seriousness, haunting images. I studied a level history, and this took me back.

but, the cold grey buildings,and bad weather were you in skeggy, or blackpool?

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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