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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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Tick-ta, Tick-ta, Alone in my room Listening to the...regular beats. The sky is covered By the black cloth Smoothly spreaded As a roof of the city. There must be two angels At each end of the sky Holding... the cloth Making waves- And the waves would be our clouds Waltzing across in beautiful grace. Each clouds has different shapes, Like the variety people in the ball. But all are imaginative reflection of thoughts. And being one of them, I shall not feel alone anymore. Just when I was in my happiest hour, A bird awake me in her whisper. I'm alone Again... In my room. ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
When I was a little boy, probably around 8 or 9, I used to pull my bed over by the window so that I could fall asleep in the starlight... I'd spend most of those nights, before sleeping, with my eyes opened and watching the sky. I live in the city so it's difficult to see the stars, with the streetlights and pollution and whatnot, but I still got a great deal of comfort just gazing up at that black cloth and watching clouds and clouds of smoke just walking by. This poem brought me back there, to when I was young and naive enough to fantasize about something fantastic, such as angels holding a cloth at either end, in the sky... and when that bird would whisper me awake, I too would frown, because I was so happy just being alone and dreaming with my eyes open. Thank you for the memory. I'm putting this in my library, because I'll like to read it again sometime in the future... just to bring me back there again.  Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
glad you like it It is amazing how nature works!~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I really liked the concept for this poem, the idea of a black and two angels really appealed to me. Thank you for the great read. Andrew |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
nicely done. The images created... then the subtle let down as waking pushes out those images... well crafted. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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