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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Roses are red Violets are blue, Sometimes I drink out of the toilet. The End |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hehe... cute little piece, Romeo!  "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Well now I'm curious, is there going to be a sequel? LOL! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I would like to give you a constructive critique...don't take up comedy as a profession...and you DO write - I'm waiting for that novel you know!! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How about: Roses are red, Violets are blue, I drink out of the toilet, Why don't you? Well, you asked for critique....  Elizabeth |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Christopher--Sometimes you got to do what you got to do. |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
~holds face in hands~ I cannot BELIEVE you put this up here. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It's ok Christopher, to call the plumber to fix the kitchen faucet!!!! "I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What a coincidence...so does my boyfriend! and C? I've been waiting a long time to do this to you!  [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-02-2001).] |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
awww...c'mon you peoples... I wuz just playin' 'round!  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
*woofs* You and me have a lot in common then.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
I really don't think toilet humor is appropriate for this forum, try Adult! hehehehehe just kidding!  Colin Suburbia is where the developer bulldozes out the trees, then names the streets after them. - Bill Vaughan |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Elizabeth, I think he should leave it just the way it is. Adding the fourth line, it won't be a Haiku any more.  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Haiku? I think NOT! This is definitely a sonnet.  |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Actually, I believe it's called "pla·gia·rism". Which is sort of skippy in this case, don'tcha think? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Perhaps now you'll agree, that not just the seat of the toilet should be kept down, but also, the LID.  " Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go." T.S. Eliot |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
shaking head christopher, christopher, christopher.... |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
*laughing* Joy Our doubts are traitors, And make us loose the good we oft might win By fearing to attempt. ~Shakespeare |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
well it is fresh water... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Does your toilet have the blue stuff in it? That could make it dangerous you know  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
ARGHH!!!! I came here to find quality poetry and then I stumble on to this.... I may never write again... Michael |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Only sometimes...? Undoubtedly your best work to date. Publish, I say! Me |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
ROFL! You took me off guard with this one Chris! Just make sure the water isn't yellow before that first big gulp |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
It was a joke. Really. I swear! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well this did give me a chuckle |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Roses are red My dog is blue He drank from the toilet Now has a green hue. You figure out the color scheme.  |
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the romantic fanatic Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 26Spokane, WA U.S.A. |
My, my, doesn't this style seem familiar. I wonder why? Interesting, short, and well, um, yeah I guess it's okay. Hee-hee. "Don't write much"? Who are you trying to kid? D-mon |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hehehe...i liked this one.. cute..keep writing  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I prefer Elizabeth's version. This was good but it could do with a revision, the rhyme scheme was defied in the last line. Nice work, nonetheless. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Chris, have you been to Hawaii lately.. or do you just enjoy beautiful girly flowers around yourself? |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Chris is a flower child! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
too much information Chris, though I must ask do you flush it first before taking a drink? sorry just curious. "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Uh erhm bleh umm... yeeep.. Ohmygosh. well. THAT was unexpected! good onya Chris, everyone should have a hobby, even if if DOES involve drinking out of the toilet..  Yeah I like this.. it's a keeper.. -LC |
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