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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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Slam, the new millenium porno packin pentiums anthrax backed insentives from tactical delerium fear impacting practices pain from airplane crashes enflaming western masses to patriotic passion we act in common fashion lash out without world sanction while poverty seeks sanctum as forces start to flank them enforcing hollow claims that theres secret actions aimed at our spooked and wounded homeland but nukes haven't been shown and we push on irregaurdless like bombing them is harmless inside this global venue the saga will continue when Slam |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
The next slam already happened, Kevin... in fact, plenty of slams have come... the only problem was, nobody on our half of the globe really cared. That's war for you - if they're not our innocents, they're not innocent at all. Great poem though... like how you made it cyclic. That's just how war is... slam leads to slam leads to slam. When will it end? Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Awesome post! I loved it. Great rhythm and great rhymes! It sounded a lot like the lyrics to a serious dance groove. Only complaint is this line: "we push on irregaurdless" This is a double negetive. I assume you mean "we push on regardless." But in either case, this line is somewhat awkward and presents the only major hurdle this piece needs to overcome. This poem belongs in my library nonetheless. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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