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LoveBug

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0 posted 2002-11-30 11:39 PM

I don't know about this...
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My nerves are killing
I think of the past few weeks
All the pent up pain
The tension
Carrying so much alone

I stand before them
Closing my eyes for a moment
Imagining myself alone
Just me
And Him

I’ve got it to an art
So when I open my eyes
No matter who is before me
It is still just me
And Him

My song begins to come
It’s not just my control
It’s not just a gift
Although it is, in a way
A gift from God to you

It is also a gift
A gift from God to me
When all the pain
When all the stress
Is just too much to bear

I sing...

Smooth out the kinks in my soul
Clean it out
Make it right
Dear God, I pray
Sooth my spirit today

Dear God, give me song
With each note
I’m smoothed
With each stroke...
Brushed into calm

Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us.

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

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Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-12-01 06:06 PM

Lovely writing, Erica. You've very nicely expressed your state of mind in this particular situation, the tension beforehand, and the relief that comes aftewards.

Nice work. Thanks for using one of my phrases.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

2 posted 2002-12-01 10:44 PM

*smile*

music... can cure many things (unless i'm the one singing!)

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

3 posted 2002-12-04 02:35 PM

i liked the poem more and more as i read it, and it is a sentiment that i definetely agree with. James taylor has always been my person favorite when it came to singing for comfort.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Alwye

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In the space between moments

4 posted 2002-12-23 10:46 PM

I love to sing too...there is a release in it, a kind of abandonment almost...I liked the way you went from tension to song, then to the release you felt. It's been too long since I've read something of yours, old friend.

*Krista Knutson*

"If we have no peace, it is because we've forgotten that we belong to each other." ~Mother Teresa

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

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Ann Arbor, MI

5 posted 2002-12-25 12:25 PM

Hey Erica. I've missed ya.

This started out as a reader-cringe sort of poem..but then was completely transformed into the reader-happy-sigh sort...you've done very well with this one. I'm glad I got to read it.
~Carly

A ruddy drop of manly blood
The surging sea outweighs;
The world uncertain comes and goes,
The lover rooted stays.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

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6 posted 2003-01-02 05:02 AM

This is a cool little poem about facing a crowd when performing a musical act. I like your interplay between God, speaker, and audience. You do a good job in examining the various facets and dynamics of that relationship.

Sorry, but I am a bit too tired to find holes in this piece right now. Perhaps I will "lash out" at it tomorrow sometime...

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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