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Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

0 posted 2001-02-12 04:40 PM

(I know, I know, I left but Aimster wrote one, so I thought I would too!)

The two of us smell the rain
and stand waiting to be clean.
We wait and lift up our eyes
and our ears and hear tomorrow’s thunder
Do you hear the sound?
It trickles through the core
of a heart-only one heart.
Smell the petals and taste them.
We are not afraid to stand there
The two of us will cleanse completely.
and when the storm is over
one will turn and walk away in remembrance;
giving of her passion
and she will smile.
She will be released for she isn’t needed anymore.
The other will continue standing
and confront many storms
She will once open wholly writ.
Serenity will emerge with a
new birth.
Love will fill outstretched hands,
and she will fall to her knees
praying for understanding.
She will smile with a new perception and know truth.
and never be afraid, or alone again
For she smelled the rain
and followed the signs to completion.

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis

[This message has been edited by Kathleen (edited 02-12-2001).]

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-02-12 06:07 PM

Hey i really liked the end there......she followed the path to completion.....awww very nice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-02-13 09:27 AM

Nice to see your spirit, Kathleen....for I know you're "really" not here....{~,^}

Gene
Senior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

3 posted 2001-02-13 12:01 PM

Kathleen,

What do you mean you left? Not from PIP? We have to see more wonderful poems like this.

Gene
(formerly, u_gene)

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-02-13 01:00 PM

I know, Gene !! I'm trying to heal from a health problem, but well, thank you so much for this encouragement, I do love the Sanctuary and the Spiritual forum has been such a blessing, so ....well............look for me around

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-02-15 09:38 PM

Kathleen,

Perfect ending my friend. And you know, you are never alone.

Jennifer

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

6 posted 2002-12-04 12:32 PM

I love the storyline of this. Very interesting, seems like it could be a really intriguing short film or something. You give so much depth to this simple scene, all of the symbols underlying it really make the mind gape in awe...

Especially the ending, which left me very satisfied. This is a very well-written poem.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

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