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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Thus I die knowing this-- dig a grave to bury heart. Take my pupils in pinpoint and spear them into voodoo spark and draw the ve'-ve' with my tears a puddle toed around-- remove this pounding from my ears and tell me silences be sound... I wish there were a sacrifice-- I should've bought the other dove-- where's my pipe? and my incense? Burn it. Leave the ash of love. Cloak my head b'neath the gauze... tell me reasons of what was... above my head? angels sang? Thus I am dimmed for sake of God... I have more reverence than you! The Father delights in his child-- he calls unto the Mother--"You.. come see, m'love--she's US exiled..." Now it is for them--I dance. Selling flowers in a glance of this solo rectitude... I am offspring. I dance for you... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Off to work, I'll be back. ~yeti |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A determined and powerful piece Luscious. I loved it. Maree  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity~ Very touching write. A tale of a broken heart and shattered dreams. Off with the sadness on with a smile. Dance solo for a little while. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
you are beyond me cowgirl  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Love is a fine gris gris, is it not? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Beautiful writing, Serenity. I particularily like how you've structured the stanzas to be quite vertical, and yet, you have a meter scheme that runs from line to line. You kept the flow effective without making your device too obvious, which is interesting... I really enjoyed reading this. The images are perfect and correlate excellently with the poem's theme. Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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