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Rough draft

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-09-27 02:19 PM

When you write,
it's early morning --
a draft of dreams
and understanding.

So let the wind
blow these pages
into the hands
of those who need them.

Asleep for some.
Awake for others.

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

1 posted 2002-09-27 03:00 PM

The words of a true poet. Enjoyed the read.

Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood
L cohen

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

2 posted 2002-09-27 08:28 PM

Superbly written, Mikey...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2002-10-02 02:09 PM

Since it's a rough Draft
perhaps you won't mind me adding inside your words.

When you write,
it's early morning –
lines still mind fill
a draft of dreams
and understanding.
wind thoughts quick brought

So let the wind
blow these pages
turning leaves off mind trees
into the hands
of those who need them.
holding quills thought unfills

Asleep for some.
Awake for others.
between the two as poets do

Gloom

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-10-02 03:00 PM

Nah, do with it what you want, Gloom. I'm glad my words were somethin' you could build off of.

I'm more of a minimal style myself, but I enjoy what you've added.

Thanks for readin'.

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