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wranx
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0 posted 2002-09-21 02:38 PM


Rons' "dinner time" piece made me recall the General Store that my parents once owned.


I recall a time
Long ago
On a hot summer day
Before I knew how to think

A grubby, feral creature
Sitting atop a kerosene tank
In the gravel parking lot
Beside the General Store
With a cold orange soda
And a can of Vienna Sausage

It was a time
When cars, were great mechanical beasts
When you always looked up to see a plane

When a dog was just another kid
Who couldn’t throw a ball
But could run really fast

Nope,
No thoughts of school or of war
No thoughts of politics or women

Not a thought about nothin’ at all
Except, perhaps

How does one go about fishin’
That first little sausage
Out of that tightly packed can?
Ed


[This message has been edited by wranx (09-21-2002 11:36 PM).]

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brian sites
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1 posted 2002-09-21 03:59 PM


when you always looked up to see a plane

had that again
bout a year ago
dinwe?

this is pure
wranx

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2 posted 2002-09-22 03:25 AM


Wranx,
Reminds me of a Faulkner story I can't remember the name of at this hour. But it featured a description of deviled ham in cans that stayed with me.

As does this.

brian madden
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3 posted 2002-09-22 08:48 AM


wonderful poem, vivid words, I can almost taste those vienna sausages. Could be cos I haven't eaten yet.

Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood
L cohen

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4 posted 2003-07-23 10:52 AM


AAhhhhh Ed, I remember those day, when things were just simple and amazing....I suppose things are still amazing nowadays hehe....

my fav lines....

It was a time
When cars, were great mechanical beasts
When you always looked up to see a plane

When a dog was just another kid
Who couldn’t throw a ball
But could run really fast



Maree


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5 posted 2003-07-23 07:33 PM


you brough back the simplicity i've beeen longing for
Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-07-24 03:00 PM


i remember leaving doors unlocked
knowing your neighbours
leaving you bike outside a store
getting up to turn the channel
vinyl music
sleep

Tiersdin
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7 posted 2003-07-24 11:49 PM


I don't know how I'd managed to miss this Gem!

Loved this.


~Tier

Nicole
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8 posted 2003-08-08 11:17 PM


I'm digging around tonight, and struck gold!   My parents used to own a little store, and this brought back lovely little memories.  I used to sit under the counter and watch the little old b&w tv, eating peanut-butter and crackers.  There was a method to it, too.  Sweet, innocent simplicity.  I needed the reminder.  Loved this!
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9 posted 2004-05-15 01:04 PM


i remember those little cans of vienna sausages with the ring pull lid
you made me *giggle*

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