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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-02-05 05:51 PM

in soft of night's light
lips meet in tenderest touch
he loves me that much

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2001-02-05 06:06 PM

This is so beautifully romantic.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2001-02-05 10:54 PM

Karilea:

and with three lines
you say so much
of love

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-02-06 08:41 AM

Now this is one form I've never tried, how did you do this and so marvelous!

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis

Gene
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since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

4 posted 2001-02-06 12:01 PM

Sunshine came softly
through my window this morning;
I loved it that much.

Gene
(formerly, u_gene)

Sunshine

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5 posted 2001-02-06 02:04 PM

swift morn with sunlight
dancing on your shoulder now
sunbeams laughing song

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-02-06 02:42 PM

Very nicely done!!! I thought the senryu was VERY sweet. I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Sunshine

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7 posted 2001-02-06 03:04 PM

night meets morn again
soft sunlight pledges love then
greetings, midnight, come

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

8 posted 2001-02-07 12:04 PM

SunShine, very nice senryu and the last line is so warming.

Parker

Sunshine

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9 posted 2001-02-07 03:15 PM

Parker...thank you...

eventide brings forth
hidden thoughts kept from day's sun
of love, of just, one...

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 02-07-2001).]

Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

10 posted 2001-02-08 02:12 PM

I'm loving this... all of it!

Sunshine

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11 posted 2001-02-08 05:02 PM

Munda, thank you...

soft the sun swift, sets
orange blazing red blazing fire
sets forth all desire

Acies

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since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

12 posted 2001-02-23 10:41 PM

awwwww...that is so romantic

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

13 posted 2001-02-24 12:01 PM

Beautifully written. Soft and sweet.

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