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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-04-16 10:04 AM

Let us walk in the shadows of the day,
Slow in pace in the cool along the way,
Let us pause as we go taking time light
Let us stroll all the day till we reach the night.
Let us see the sunset fall behind the hills
Slow the night will huddle us with chills
As the spring flower close till the morrow
Let us walk in the night of shadow.
Let us hold each other in walking
And quiet will speak when not talking,
Let us walk with no place we need go,
Let us pause gathering things grown slow.
Slow the day will return to the sky
Let us go without the asking why,
Slow in pace in the warm along the way
Let us walk together through the day.

Gloom

JP
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

1 posted 2002-04-16 04:19 PM

I'm liking this... will take me about 20 more reads to know exactly what's getting to me... I'll write more when I have the details...

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2002-04-16 09:19 PM

Hey there! You write beautifully. I like this side of you.

Course the other side is good too....just different.

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2002-04-17 07:19 AM

Thank you, JP,
Although I didn’t think it quite that deep,
I am pleased you liked it enough to consider a reread.

Thank you, Poet deVine,
Some have said both sides of me are “different”,
Glad you enjoyed this one.

Gloom

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2002-04-19 11:23 PM

Yes, Let's. sigh...for all of my frantic mania, this is what I am lacking these days.
Hmmm...blackberries are getting ripe, too!

An excellent idea! Thanks.

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

5 posted 2002-05-08 02:25 AM

"Slow the night will huddle us with chills"

Beautiful

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

6 posted 2002-05-09 07:02 PM

Like ogres and onions, poetry has layers....

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

7 posted 2005-01-13 04:25 PM

I like the tempo... You used just the right words and sounds to achieve perfection in imagery and developing the mood.

Bravo!
misc

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

8 posted 2005-01-20 08:02 PM

Such beautiful images, and a much more beautiful meaning behind it all. If we could only slow down, walk with our loved partner, and take in everything like this poem describes. After a long university day, this poem calmed me very much. Thank you.

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

9 posted 2005-02-09 01:12 AM

Very lovely writing, Professor Gloom.

....jo

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10 posted 2006-09-30 10:31 AM

Yes, indeed....and when I've had too much of light but far too much of darkness, gloom is just about right.

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