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Munda
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0 posted 2001-02-05 01:25 PM

A Spenserian Love Sonnet

Oh how sweet love's embrace does hold me tight
Alike the softest touch by Angel's wing
Caress of tenderness and pure delight
Aloft the stars and moon two spirits sing
  Alike the softest touch by Angel's wing
  As when the moon embracing morning's sun
  Aloft the stars and moon two spirits sing
  Two melodies entwine to only one
    As when the moon embracing morning's sun
    Ethereal awareness fills their eyes
    Two melodies entwine to only one
    In universal peace aloofness dies
      All cuddled up and safe in love's embrace
      I find myself lost in love's calming face

        Munda

[This message has been edited by Munda (edited 02-05-2001).]

Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-02-05 01:38 PM

I'm impressed here....

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2 posted 2001-02-05 01:40 PM

Munda--Thank you for gracing us here with this beautiful love poem. I don't know much about Spenserian Sonnets, but the love part did sound like the perfect place to be.

Gene
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3 posted 2001-02-05 05:04 PM

Munda,

I just heard from Spenser...he's jealous.

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4 posted 2001-02-05 05:41 PM

I think the Sanctuary is going to become my permanent home.....this is lovely!

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5 posted 2001-02-06 02:32 PM

Very lovely indeed. Beautiful sonnet!

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6 posted 2001-02-07 01:44 PM

Munda, This is beautiful, you are mastering so many different forms of poetry it's amazing to me.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.

Munda
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7 posted 2001-02-08 02:29 PM

Geesh guys... thank you all for such kind words.

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8 posted 2001-02-14 01:16 PM

Time to move the lovey dovey stuff to the top of the line!

Local Parasite

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9 posted 2004-04-29 03:03 PM

This is more of a Pantoum than a Spenserian sonnet... I don't know if you did that on purpose or not? Spenser's format just uses the rhyme scheme that you've used but doesn't repeat entire lines like this---

Either way I liked it, I don't know if he'd be jealous but I thought it was very nice...

Hope to see you posting sometime soon.
Brian

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10 posted 2004-05-03 02:21 PM

Poems like this are the reason that I come straight to the sanctuary when I come to this sight .... well, since I figured out how to get here anyway LOL

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2004-05-03 07:14 PM

This is truly a beautiful sonnet Munda.

I'm keeping it.

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Munda
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12 posted 2004-05-04 12:36 PM

LOL Brian, this is the one time I completely misunderstood Nan's explanation in the Workshop! I have no idea what to call this, but it's most definitely no Spenserian Sonnet.
I have rewritten this poem to a pantoum some time ago. Here's the final result:

Love Pantoum

Illuminated by love's sweet embrace,
Within the shelter of an Angel's wings,
Caress of tenderness and loving grace,
Aloft the stars and moon two spirits sing.

Within the shelter of an Angel's wings,
Two melodies entwine to only one.
Aloft the stars and moon two spirits sing,
And watch the moon embracing morning's sun.

Two melodies entwine to only one,
Ethereal awareness stills their cries,
As when the moon embraces morning's sun,
In universal peace all distance dies.

Ethereal awareness stills their cries,
While fantasy turns to reality,
In universal peace all distance dies,
When kindred spirits meet their destiny.

While fantasy turns to reality,
They feel the breath of immortality;
When kindred spirits meet their destiny,
The Universe composes poetry.

They feel the breath of immortality,
Caress of tenderness and loving grace;
The Universe composes poetry,
Illuminated by love's sweet embrace.

Thanks guys for bringing this back alive. I had completely forgotten about it.

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