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River Of Mortal Fantasy
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River Of Mortal Fantasy |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan 
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 raw wounds from which fraying emotions bleed you comfort my wounded heart with the essence of your warmth your love, tenderly wrapping itself around the broken pieces your tears mingle with mine to become a swiftly flowing current carrying the pain of all time into the surging river of mortal fantasy nightmares, emerging from consequence of fate lie in tatters at our feet eternally questioning past lives and forever cherishing our bonding passion copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet friend, this is a tender and sensitive piece of the compassion of true love! (sigh) May your tears forever mingle with his and together may they sparkle with happiness as you feel for each other forever and grow in compassion and understanding to love! (kiss on cheek) I love this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyra, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Madame C, Good words, good thoughts, good poem. |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Lyra I like this style,you did it very well.Very beautiful! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lyra...I believe we have all felt much of these feelings during our lifetimes...for reasons, similar...though not same... You have captured the flow of tears well within this... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A song for a soul mate, Madame C--familiar as deja vu... A delicate write that makes for a delightful read. Thank you. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lyra, this is very beautiful! Hugs, Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Lyra,this is very beautiful.You have such a wonderful way with words.I`m at my computer at home so you don`t get any clipart from me today.  TAKE CARE! Juanita |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
You remind me that being with someone helps ease any pain. I love it. |
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HumbleBee Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 52Kentucky |
A beautiful poem...I'm so thankful for friends who help soothe jagged edges of my soul...I love your poem |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Magnificent..the picture and words are so soothing to the soul. Thank you...I love it. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Lyra, This is beautiful. You wrote it so well, and it's expresses a relationship that any human is lucky to have. Nan |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thank you so much for your nice reply, Noah  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much, Sy for stopping by and for your nice reply  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Stevie.....this was my first attempt at free verse. I wrote it several months ago. Glad you liked it!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much, Barry...I wrote about my wonderful husband, who is my teddy bear.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-15-2002 04:39 PM).] |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Beautiful picture and words to go with it. The metaphore is evident and whomever this is written for and about is fortunate indeed. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Serenity, thanks so much...I'm glad you enjoyed it.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much for the hugs, Nancy  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much my dear friend, Juanita  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
JK, thanks so much for your reply...and you are right, there is nothing worse than being in pain when you are all alone.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much for loving my poem, Humblebee.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks for the hugs, Karen...I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Nan...For all else that has happened in my life, I am still glad to be me, because I have David...and this poem does describe him and our relationship.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Lyra, it is a joy to have you here. This is flowing poetry, a treasure to read and re-read. Thank you for this one. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very nicely done! A very enjoyable read! |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Lyra, I knew it had to have been written for David. It's lovely and you know I'm impressed since I can't write free verse. My hat's off to you. Nicely done. Cheryl |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Lyra - A truly beautiful and emotive write. I don't seem to follow the rhyme scheme though.  Is that because it is free verse?  I like writing free verse myself, though, I don't do it to often. Dave |
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