A Girl in The Dark (repost)

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ecrivan
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0 posted 2002-01-13 11:45 AM

The relationship that does not stick
a girl's reflection of smeared lipstick
her parents all always interfering in her issues
poor young lady's tears wets her tissues.

What of the problem of war and love
out there don't you hear the cooing of doves;
laurels of olive leaves dressing high foreheads
alas I am aware of a sinister planet I dread,

This girl's dating game is on the constant go
her rent now overdue...there went the cash flow,
her boyfriend tells her he's been dating another one
a simple turn of her head
and love's charismatic spell was undone.

In her house there were firearms to use
to punish the landlord for his rental abuse,
to kill the boyfriend that caused her to rage
and threaten her parents that placed her cradle upstage.

Young lady, violence is not the way to go
to recover your debts or gain back cash flows
there are many fish in the sea to pick for love
life is still beautiful,
in peace flies the white dove.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-13-2002 11:52 AM).]

sodpossom
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1 posted 2002-01-13 11:48 AM

Martin

You covered it pretty good.Nice message!

SEA

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2 posted 2002-01-13 11:49 AM

excellent write

ecrivan
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3 posted 2002-01-13 11:54 AM

Hey Stevie,

Great to see you clicking in,
now's your chance to go on a writing spin!

Sea,

thanks for reading, have a good Sunday!

Mistletoe Angel

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4 posted 2002-01-13 11:56 AM

(sigh) So well-said, sweet friend, I pray that we can all learn how to make peace in these situations and not afflict our anger and frustration on others in the meaning of Love. (big hugggsssss) Soooooo wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

GenXer
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5 posted 2002-01-13 12:23 PM

Very good Martin, but I am sorry to inform you that violence does solve everything.lol Nice write.

Dave

Midnitesun

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Gaia

6 posted 2002-01-13 01:50 PM

You write well of the dark side of human behavior. And Dave's tongue is no doubt stuck in his cheek.

Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2002-01-13 02:01 PM

This is something a bit different from your usual, Martin...but I enjoyed it, nonetheless.
It was a very fine snapshot of how things can go from very right to very wrong...and you wrote it beautifully!

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

RosePetal

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8 posted 2002-01-13 03:35 PM

Very powerful message in this poem sir!
I liked it a lot.

RP

N orth Carolina Girl
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9 posted 2002-01-13 05:23 PM

Martin,a great poem with an important message.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

ecrivan
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10 posted 2002-01-13 08:22 PM

Dave,

Kidding aside I hope then you haven't been entertaining thoughts of violence..do I detect a pinch of cynical humour here?

Mid,

yes Dave has this way of wry humour, but hey diversity is what we're all about.

Madame Chip,

I'd like to more of these 'captions' of life
their vivid and I sound less like Nostrodamus
whose predictions never came through!

Juanita,

love your artwork, didn't know you had this artistic side!

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