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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2002-01-13 07:54 AM

The Garden of the Mind

She would leave my garden
My castle of illusion
Roam the catacombs of time
Rub noses with the mundane.
Stay pasture with the flock.
Bruise upon the rocks of chaos.

I could not impede nor make it root.
Seeds of comparison not enough
To nullify her needs.
Love could not build walls high enough
To contain her freedom
Nor could it waylay or stop time.

Times ravage continues
And I wished to veil the mirror
Empathize her beauty
Surround her with grace
Cherish her with embrace.
Gone like sand castles by the sea.

So the butterfly cocoon
With the waning of the moon

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-01-13 08:01 AM

I don't know if all will see the fragility of this piece...or perhaps it is in just my eyes that I see the sheer quality of this...either way, it's a Keeper, and a promise...all wrapped up in Sy...

thank you for this Sunday morning beauty...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-01-13 08:57 AM

                    She would leave my garden
                    My castle of illusion
                    Roam the catacombs of time
                    Rub noses with the mundane.
                    Stay pasture with the flock.
                    Bruise upon the rocks of chaos.

                    I could not impede nor make it root.
                    Seeds of comparison not enough
                    To nullify her needs.
                    Love could not build walls high enough
                    To contain her freedom
                    Nor could it waylay or stop time.

                    Times ravage continues
                    And I wished to veil the mirror
                    Empathize her beauty
                    Surround her with grace
                    Cherish her with embrace.
                    Gone like sand castles by the sea.

                    So the butterfly cocoon
                    With the waning of the moon
=============================================

I've sat here for 10 minutes...pretty much stunned speechless at this ...
(that doesnt happen often..Janet Marie with nothing to say) *L*
But, speechless wont do this justice ...
There was no way to highligh just a few lines...I could not choose...or more so....
I could not seperate them from one another.....it would be like taking the sunrise out of morning sky ... like taking the moon from the stars.
Once again I ask you....do you truly know how amazing & cool your poetry is!!!!!!!!
do you know how very special this one is? *smiling*...(yes he does)
This is exceptional writing Sy ...
What the words say...and what they dont say ... touch places deep.

Who could fly from that garden of your mind and leave the kind behind???
"Not I" said the moth.  *winkiewinkie*
love ya Stinky

me

Even thru the darkest phase, be it thick or thin
Always someone marches brave, here beneath my skin
Constant Craving ... has always been.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2002-01-13 09:43 AM

Seymour - These exquisite words warm me on this snowy Sunday and gift me with dreams of spring. Thankyou, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Canuckster
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since 2002-01-09

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New Mexico, USA

4 posted 2002-01-13 10:02 AM

superior seymour. I especially like the mirrot metaphore. It really works here.

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

5 posted 2002-01-13 10:14 AM

Oh Sy, this is just beautiful. I love it.

Seymour Tabin
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Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2002-01-13 10:42 AM

Sunshine,
If this touched you than I am happy. *L*

JM,
Your words are everything I would hear and more. My Tinkerbell dear. We are on the same wave lenghts or currents. And if for no one else I would just write these poems for you.
Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky

.

Nightshade,
Glad I could warm you up on a snowy day. *L*

Canuckster,
Wonderful comment, thank you.

Smart Chick,
Thanks for the wonderful Vibs.

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-01-13 11:12 AM

(smiles) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I believe we all have these beautiful fragile thoughts, but then in the end they metamorphosize and then we are butterflies free in the heavens of love! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is utterly fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

8 posted 2002-01-13 11:14 AM

Seymour, your words are so beautiful,"waning of the moon" what a nice ending, floria

Seymour Tabin
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Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2002-01-13 12:05 PM

Noah,
Thank you for the lovely reply.

Floria,
Thank you so glad you liked it.

Martie

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Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2002-01-13 01:14 PM

Sy--

I looked up the word exquisite in the dictionary. The meaning is as follows and doesn't quite say it as well as Janet Marie does..but nothing could.

Exquisite-- "a : marked by flawless craftsmanship or by beautiful, ingenious, delicate, or elaborate execution b : marked by nice discrimination, deep sensitivity, or subtle understanding"

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2002-01-13 01:28 PM

A work of art. Exquisite, is indeed the word.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

12 posted 2002-01-13 01:33 PM

Martie,
What else could I give you but a big

Serenity,
And you too.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

13 posted 2002-01-13 01:40 PM

There is a richness to this one, makes the reader want to dig deeper
this is wonderuly, Seymour.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

14 posted 2002-01-13 01:45 PM

Thank you Kathleen. *L*

Gentle Spirit
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15 posted 2002-01-13 01:57 PM

Ya know, everytime I see post by Sey, I know it's gonna be a good one before I read it, but this Sey is so truly beautiful and incredible. All I can say is thank you for touching my day. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

16 posted 2002-01-13 02:00 PM

Quoting Martie's quoting of the dictionary:

Exquisite-- "a: marked by flawless craftsmanship or by beautiful, ingenious, delicate, or elaborate execution
b: marked by nice discrimination, deep sensitivity, or subtle understanding"

yes .... exactly ....

"Seeds of comparison not enough
To nullify her needs.
Love could not build walls high enough
To contain her freedom
Nor could it waylay or stop time.

Times ravage continues
And I wished to veil the mirror
Empathize her beauty
Surround her with grace
Cherish her with embrace.
====================================

"marked by nice discrimination, deep sensitivity, or subtle understanding"

Like I said........yes ...exactly...

EXQUISITE

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

17 posted 2002-01-13 02:11 PM

A poem that is stunning in its beauty, as fragile and gentle as a butterfly wing. And with the freedom of softly floating words. A poem to treasure and keep, a poem to share. Thank you for sharing.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

18 posted 2002-01-13 02:18 PM

Love could not build walls high enough
To contain her freedom.

Oh my, this was enchanting,
enjoyed your mystical words.

This was truly captivating.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

19 posted 2002-01-13 03:53 PM

Gentle Spirit,
And I can only thank you for the wonderful reply.

My dear Tinkerbell,
You are so close to me now, I'm afraid you may catch my horrid cold. LOL Love ya Stinky

Midnitesun,
It is my pleasure. *L*

Blue Serenade,
Thank you for the captivating.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

20 posted 2002-01-13 06:24 PM

OH NO...my Stinky has a cold???
Well ya know whats good for a cold dont ya...
yeppers...raspberry tea and playing doctor ROFL

Here baby ... take two of these and call me in the morning

*ww* teehee

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

21 posted 2002-01-13 06:29 PM

This is romantic love poetry at it's most elegant and it's finest!

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

22 posted 2002-01-13 08:31 PM

JM,
I'll take two every four hours. I'm sure it will help. Love Ya

Ellie,
An elegant comment, thank you.

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