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Beki
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0 posted 2002-01-13 05:33 AM

102)

across blue canvas
orange deepens to magenta -
Pacific sunset.

202)

No moon tonight -
scent of jasmine lingers
somewhere in the dark.

Sunshine

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1 posted 2002-01-13 07:15 AM

Beki...I like!

Charisma

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2 posted 2002-01-13 09:41 AM

as always beautiful haikus Beki

Charisma

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02

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3 posted 2002-01-13 09:46 AM

Thank you
For two
Brand new
Haiku.

Enjoyed!

Newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Canuckster
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since 2002-01-09

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4 posted 2002-01-13 09:48 AM

good work. I like both the traditional form and the freer form you've done here. great moment in time grasps that really show what haiku is all about.

rosepetals25

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5 posted 2002-01-13 10:04 AM

Beki,

I like..

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

SmartChick
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6 posted 2002-01-13 10:10 AM

These are the best two haikus I have read.

Mistletoe Angel

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7 posted 2002-01-13 11:08 AM

(smiles) Ooohhhhh...I love them, these are soooooo gorgeous! (sigh) You always paint the most beautiful visions, sweet friend, I can almost smell the jasmine and see the sunset on the beach horizon! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet Beki, these are fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Beki, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Startime
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8 posted 2002-01-13 11:23 AM

WOW!!!The one was so visual and the other one I could almost smell. Stunning. I love them. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

sodpossom
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9 posted 2002-01-13 11:24 AM

Very beautiful!

Skyfyre
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10 posted 2002-01-13 04:49 PM

Beki:

I have missed your talent for wonderfully expressive minimalism.

(As opposed to my talent for wordiferousness)

Beautiful.

~Linda

ellie LeJeune
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11 posted 2002-01-13 05:04 PM

Exquisite haiku...Bravo! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Beki
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12 posted 2002-01-14 05:13 PM

Thank you everyone, I do so appreciate your taking the time to read and comment

Smart chick , these are not the best two haiku I have written (Beki smiles) so please, come read more at my site, www.room1401.com/beki I would be glad to email you others as well....:-)

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