Open Poetry #18 |
The Goddess Nods |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
bitty bites of blues a highway line beneath my feet-- miles and miles of you. I am the thumb that begs a ride. You're the pushpin on the map; our difference just inches wide. each breath that you exhale is "home." I know each thought before you think because they are my own. They are a healing spring. I feel myself in bathe in them, a cleansing of within. I've never even liked myself. But there must be "holy" in me, for that is where you dwell. since I've seen the face of God. All the complexes are simple. I'm redeemed. The Goddess nods. [This message has been edited by serenity (01-13-2002 01:53 AM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - you do write some very powerful and telling words. This is a beautiful writing, and I enjoy reading all of yours... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is pure poetry flowing all over this page! Great write, sweet serenity. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds like we're coming, or going, or just getting there, but whichever way it is, sounds like the ride was fine... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Little bits of funk and rhythm bitty bites of blues a highway line beneath my feet-- miles and miles of you. A suitcase filled with all of me-- I am the thumb that begs a ride. You're the pushpin on the map; our difference just inches wide. You are the land of which I dreamed-- each breath that you exhale is "home." I know each thought before you think because they are my own. ===================================================== Yer so kewwwwl ... ya just wrote a song baby...(a moth anthem at that!!) this is classic Sen ...rhyme divine wrapped longing and I love the clever map/pushpin word play and metaphor. very very cool indeed. can I be your groupie me Even thru the darkest phase, be it thick or thin |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Very thought provoking and I like the moving from the map image to the reality. Very good read indeed. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
serenity, I totallyyyyyyyyy like this! Your writing style is so... well.. cool. I very much enjoyed this Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Sooooooo wonderfully expressed, sweet friend, such love and passion feels your destined words of happiness! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, this is fabulous, you are a Goddess of Poetry. We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
"a suitcase filled with all of me" very imaginative , I love this so much Serenity, great poem. floria |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so good. Nothing else I can say, but I love it. Sandra |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Great Write Serenity, very deep and thought prevoking I enjoyed. Regards, Olias. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love it Karen!! What can I say that hasn't already been said...? This is powerful and way cool ! Enjoyed this soooo much! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Popping in to say thank you to you all--this was one of those "don't know where it came from things"--it was fun to just write and see where my pen would take me. Sort of like the road! Thanks again, you are all so wonderful! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
se'en: The title of this was very deceptive. I clicked, thinking to find something lofty and classic, and instead was delighted by soft, hand-woven honesty. Homespun, almost, and quite comfortable to read. Well done, my friend. Your poetry has indeed grown in many ways. ~Linda |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Linda--I can't tell you how much your praise means to me! As you already know, I'm a big fan of yours, so I hug this reply to my heart. Thank you so much! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This flowed like a pop-in...so spontaneous and full of life and energy...Nicely done lady...very much so.. |
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