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water stone's eternity
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water stone's eternity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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a water stone's eternity a trickling becoming stream as watergrasses hide tadpole. return of sun, diminishing breast of Mother Earth in weep streams becoming river's flow. a river grows and pulls a tide insides of the earth wax wild going where the wind might blow. sea begs to see in ocean's eyes-- eats hungrily the sands of time in waves of rabid foam. Water vapors, sworling wind... newborn clouds, pregnant with rain-- creation must create again. |
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Charms85 New Member
since 2002-01-11
Posts 2 |
wow. that was a very lovely poem. I'm sorry. I would make it more constructive, but it's well past midnight, and I must get some rest soon. I'm very sorry. But from a poet to a poet, I can say that your poem was deeply motivating and inspiring. Thanks for such a beautiful poem. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this makes nature come completely alive.....well done and I mean that Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
your words model the creative process you describe. Good marriage of subject with style. Thanks fo this good read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A tinkling of rain in weep a water stone's eternity ==================================== breast of Mother Earth in weep streams becoming river's flow. River flows in wicked wide a river grows and pulls a tide insides of the earth wax wild going where the wind might blow. Edge of water--delta pride-- sea begs to see in ocean's eyes-- eats hungrily the sands of time in waves of rabid foam. Refrain of symphony's intend. =============================== creation must create again. You do know how very COOL this poem is dont you... its damn cool...its groovy waaay cool   love this me mystic poetess of rhyme divine  I ask why you come here, you say just because |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - you write with such depth of you, and your writings are just, well just, u'mmmm, just the bestest... BC |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
aha. . . now, this is a portrait of the author's universe. . . one that speaks to us all. . . well done. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you have a command of the sounds of the english language that is dynamic and exhuberant and mesmerising your poetry is uniquely you and embodies your heart the syntax, the meter, the rhythm, the images....... the soul of it.... all of it.... it's serenely well done |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yep, what Doreen said Sandra |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh I like what you do with words Serenity. floria |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Serenity - Beautiful imagery. Really liked how each stanza building upon the previous one. Well done. Dave |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Ooooooohhh, this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, it's like the cycle of life repeating itself, where the desert dries the stream only to see the rain fall again once more! This is a gorgeous symphony of nature, sweet friend, I love it!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Please please please please please please please write a book and send it to me!!! Encino, CA 91316  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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