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Free Verse From Me…NOT!
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Free Verse From Me…NOT! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States 
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Free Verse From Me…NOT! By Larry Chadwick I thought I would write some free verse, So I sat down and tried so hard to think. It just seems my mind doesn’t work that way, As I try to apply to this paper some ink. Guess I haven’t figured out how it’s done, I just know that it’s tough to be hip. So here I sit writing in rhyme, Feeling completely like a dip. I’m old enough I shouldn’t care, But boy I really wanted to try. It doesn’t seem to be working yet, And I am almost ready to cry. Finally I decided I don’t care, What people think of my poems. Cause I write them for me, And that’s all that matters. Holy cow! What was that? I may have written a free verse. But here I go all over again, This rhyming thing can sure be a curse! [This message has been edited by Larry C (01-10-2002 11:55 PM).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I know what you mean Larry..i want to natually rhyme too...i have to force myself not too haa...sometimes...this was cute ~Victoria~ "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Larry - this is just great, free verse eh? Not bad, not bad at all. Okay, write somemore... BC |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Victoria, You're way ahead of me. My first verse was with rwood (1 verse) and this my second. Don't want to rush into anything! LOL Bill, Sorry...you didn't double dare me. ROTFLMAO |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Larry - Congrats on your very first free verse stanza. I had the same problem at first with free verse, because I felt without rhyme, a poem had no rhythm. But that is not true, it just takes awhile to get used to. I also took some kind of tonic to cure me of the dreaded rhyming curse.lol Nice write. Dave |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Dave, Technically...it's my second. But like that is alot of mileage. LOL And what was in your tonic. As to free verse; most of it is a challenge for me even as a reader. However, I have found in here several who make me long for some of that touch. Ya' know? |
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amigo Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 520the earth school |
This is my problem too, you C Sailing in the same boat, aren't V? Before I hear someone tell or L I better follow the lead given by U... G...it's hard.....thanks for sharing Larry dear....  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
amigo, Oh clever one...how did we get stuck in this boat? |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (giggles in delight) YAY!!! You just did it!!! (smiles) It's so wonderful how our thoughts will just pour out and before your very eyes, abracadabra...a beautiful free verse! (big hugggssssss) I love it, sweet friend, may we always write for ourselves and share our thoughts to the world with a loving smile! I love it, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Larry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Wanna know a secret? People who write in rhyme generally tend to eventually have superior free verse because they carry things learned in structure that only get better in so called "free" verse. Don't apologize. Good rhyme is hard to find.  |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Constrict not that which lies in flow of speech As water it slips freely across the rock edges and sooths like silver creeping shadows Proud of you even still..Thank you Larry. Your verse is you..wherever you take us. Sincerely, Regina [This message has been edited by rwood (01-11-2002 06:28 PM).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling* dear man...I don't care if you write in free verse or rhyme...I just love the way your words feel to me..they make me smile and that means so much. Of course you have to understand when one is so perfect at rhyme they just can't help but think that way..and you have perfected just such an art...**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Larry darling boy What!! 'tis utterly wonderful darling boy, I agree good rhyme is hard to find, unless it's written by the best, Emmmmm that would be you then. You write whatever darling boy I'll still read it Just don't start writing about fishing, I can't get excited by fishing. (And don't believe Keth when she says I'm always fishing for compliments 'tis not true. As always darling boy this is fabulous and I love it.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Finally I decided I don’t care, What people think of my poems. Cause I write them for me, And that’s all that matters" I think I can say for almost anyone here, that your poems in which ever style you take are yours...and often, all the time, touch those that read....besides, I DOUBLE DARE YOU...*l* just saw the note above...sorry...any way, you write em' and I'll always read em'.. Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-11-2002 06:36 PM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
HAHAHAHA Larry, I am always being told by other poets to "ditch" the rhyme. BUT I LOVE IT. I mean, Don't they understand, I think in rhyme, I speak in rhyme. LOL I loved this so much. floria |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Many poets who write only in free verse, think that rhyming poetry is not real poetry because the rhyme carries the poem and in so called real poetry, the thought should carry the poem. But I think it takes infinitely more intelligence and talant(both of which you, Larry...have in abundance), to carry off a good rhyming poem. I just like your poems...free verse or rhyming or as this poem is...a combination of both.....now thats REALLY hard to do well! But...you did it.  By the way, Dave's remedy..or whatever he calls it, for rhyming...is N.Y. Pizza. Its so nasty, you'll never want to rhyme anything again! copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
OK Larry.... I don't know if you can do it... But I think you are a great poet... And if you have to write rhyme.. Well just keep doing it any time... Nice poem Larry C. You rhymed the free verse well.... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You mean to say you write in rhyme??  Only kidding, Larry!!! I feel the same way. I've tried the free verse route but it's just not for me...or maybe I'm just not good enough for it....in either case, we shall continue to part ways and that's fine with me |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Noah, It always helps to have a cheerleader! Thanks Noah. Canuckster, If I am a test case for your theory...there may be trouble ahead! LOL If I sound too frustrated it isn't because of any effort (I've never tried). Just said for fun.  Regina, From my idol of free verse!  Thanks.Karen, You are so kind I keep thinking I'm in debt. Mushy, I am unworthy of such praise!  But...Okay I'll accept it. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, I wondered who'd be the double darer. More accurately I was hoping I got away with that. It may not be my first free verse but it will be my first free verse poem. And hey, from my other idol of free verse that's a pretty easy double dare. So you owe me. Floria, Don't you dare. We need to carry the torch of rhyme. It is our burden to bear...hehehe! Lyra, ROTFL Geesh, I love your humor! You're the best. I'm sure that included the praise. LOL I like your theory a lot and the NY Pizza is too funny. Magnus, Buddy...I'm so glad you're in these pages! Thanks for the feedback. Balladeer, Help! I got tagged with a double dare. Just when I was falling madly in love with writing poetry I got stuck with a chore. Geesh! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Larry Boy you have no choice now double dared make free verse your voice. Duet with me? In rhyme or free. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Keth, You make me laugh out loud, Writing with you, I'd be proud. We can try free verse, But it may not work...curse! YOU BET. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gotta enjoy a man with a sense of humor...enjoyed this! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, come on, Larry, let your hair down. Be free! Why, before you know it you could be spinning down the page in a wild spree of emotion! This is very nice, I enjoyed this! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
Delightful humor, Larry. This left me with a smile. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, Larry, I read almost everything you post. Even a grocery list would somehow be funny or interesting. Rhyme can be sublime or it can be funny. Free verse can flow smoother than honey, (or grungy and ugly as muddy waters.) Your post-its usually please us all. So pick up the quill & let those words fall! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Larry, Check out some of Marties' works ( If you haven't already ). Spoken as a compulsive/obsessive rhymer, she can still make me wish to write free. BTW , liked the poem. Doc |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Larry...now, about what Doc just said...blush...wow! Anyway, although I have rhymed in my time I always feel me in freedoms see so just be you is what I say it seems so many like your way!! Me too! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sunshine, That's music to my ears! Thanks. Kathleen--(Kay), Me? Let my hair down? If only it were that long again! Sunset, Welcome to Passions. I hope you like it here as much as I have. Look forward to some poetry of yours. And thanks. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Midnitesun, Dear friend...always watch for your posts and resonses. You have been way too busy lately...elsewhere! Thanks a bunch. Doc, Thanks for the tip...'cause you know I need some good tutoring! Martie, I can only be me...but...me could always change a little too! Not that I would ever put any pressure on you, but Doc said... |
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