Open Poetry #18 |
Brand New Day....A Sonnet and A Duet with Noah |
SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
And with the rising of the sun for once I felt my heart had won I felt you stir and softly sway We welcomed warm, this bright new day Opal haze shined from your silk eyes Your warm sigh took me by surprise Kissing chiffon lips where you lay Smile, love, it’s a brand new day Dreams blend into reality As you softly, reach out to me Blushing to your velvet caress To your gentle touch I confess As the sun rises we will dance, in this, our 'dream come true' romance ~Noah & SEA~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
What a beautiful duet...*sigh* dreamy and filled with tender love. Well done, you two. I love it. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Soooooo nicely done you two. great work Sea and Noah, floria |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Sea and Noah, This is just beautiful You too work so well together. Hugs to you both, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sue and Noah! Very very well done and oh so sensual! I love it!! You two sing well together and I love the sexy pic. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Startime~ you are very sweet, thank you! Strbbux~ thank you, Noah is so great to do a duet with! Tara~ thank you, it’s because Noah is so nice Nancy~ this was a lot of fun, thank you! ~SEA |
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dawn to dusk Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 68Colorado |
OH wow you two did an awsome job! Great job to both of you! It flowed so well, I have no clue who wrote what. Wonderful Noelle "Hold fast to dreams, for is dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly" Langston Hughes |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A wonderful collaberation! ...and that pic of the two of you....WOW!!! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Lovely ...nicely done noah and sea..blended well.. ~Vic "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Susan/Noah - Really enjoyed this passion filled write. The last line was definitely my favorite. Well done. Dave |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SEA & Noah - now look you two, this is just not good, it's excellent. Youse work well together... BC |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh God, that pic by Steve Hanks and that poem!!!! oh you guys did a fine job. wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
I like this. The quatrameter is effective. The meter feels a little sporadic for a stated sonnet, but as the subject is passionate love, it seems to work and reinforce the emotional quality rather than the alternative which might be more consistent metrically, but would probably lose that quality. Critique aside I enjoyed the read and caught the passion, which means it worked. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sea & Noah, I don't know how you did it , but you did. A lovely write, enjoyed. |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Noah and the Sea just seem to be a match made in heaven. I'm heavy on the covet after reading this, so hopefully the Lord will forgive my transgression. Beautiful collaboration. Roger |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Ya'll make this seem so easy! I've been trying to write a sonnet and it just isn't happening. Great poem! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Noah you were made to be close to (the) SEA, there is nothing wooden in this write, you two are quite the matched pair. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Thank you so much for all your beautiful comments, sweet friends, we had so much fun writing this together! (big hugggssssss) We love you all so so much!!! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A beautiful duet... |
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