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There is a Summit
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There is a Summit |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
There is a summit That finds us all But at the base The expanse so wide There is terror. The mind cries While the wind sings And the emotions Run to hopelessness And to fear. But, foot by foot With pull and strain The body climbs And feels the toil To reach the top. Along the way The mind shows up It was behind Burried in the snow, In the emotion. And dance it does Around the shell With panicked anxiety Then joins it's home Making only one. On it goes Body and soul Scrapped and battered Bruised and torn Toward the peak. Near the crest To stop and breathe The urge to quit Seems eminently clear But, no, not yet. With steady crawl Two bloodied feet And blistered hands On shattered knees The point is made. I can see. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, the mind has a way of showing up like that...very nice piece. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very nice. adversity makes the rewards all the sweeter. As Khalil Gibran said- only through sorrow can we know joy. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Very nicely done, Amusemi I especially liked And dance it does Around the shell With panicked anxiety Then joins it's home Making only one. the reference to the mind and the body as separate entities joining to make a whole person. I also like the way you portray the the struggle as ending in a reward. With steady crawl Two bloodied feet And blistered hands On shattered knees The point is made. I can see. and your point is made.....beautifully  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Amusemi - It is a tough and long journey to find out who we truly are. I know my hands and feet are still getting nicked up. Very good. Dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done! Much enjoyed! Hugs, Nancy |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
BRAVO!!!! I know my climb is still painful. Brilliant poem, with such truth for us all. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Much truth here amusemi. good write, floria |
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