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Through The Mist
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Through The Mist |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Through The Mist By: Noah Eaton 1/6/01 Through the evening I pontificate to her Muse Waking up to her soft kiss, and my the heavens become loose Showering with her in opal moonbeams Reaching for her hand, swinging with her, sweeping her off her feet Oh, the golden glow of your body The glow of your saffron flesh to the moons sea The radiant blush of your cheeks of caramel Your smile widening to the chatter of heavens bells Combing the stars with you, braiding them into your hair Polishing your moist lips, your heart is what I want to wear Between the covers, I will dream under the stars chandelier I am your Knight Of Pythias, you are my Guinevere Through The Mist, our fantasies will come alive Every time I glimpse into the waterfalls of your eyes Together we’ll shower in these opal moonbeams Massaging your body in lovers heavenly gleam… |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Can I be your Guinevere?? This is so beautiful Noah! Your writings are always so tender and heartfelt. (hugs) You number 1 fan, RP |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh Noah, you could sure capture someones heart with this write. This is just beautiful. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh sweet Noah! You have gone and done it again! I can hear the sighs from all the women of Passions after they read this romantic write. Nicely done.  ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Once again, another great piece of work! Noelle |
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dawn to dusk Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 68Colorado |
Noah, once again, another great write! Noelle "Hold fast to dreams, for is dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly" Langston Hughes |
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Mac Attack Member
since 2001-12-12
Posts 100Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Imagery is certinally your talent! I especially liked "Combing the stars with you, braiding them into your hair." Sigh...  Kudos! Mac |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this much  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* magic flows from the pen of our romantic knight of Passions. Well done, Noah. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You have such a loving heart and generous spirit. Noah, some lady is going to be very blessed and soon I hope! Kathleen-- |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Very nice, Full of emotion, Although I find some of your lines a bit too long, A touch on the bulky side, Perhaps, you could break them Where one might normally pause for breath. Reaching for her hand, swinging with her, sweeping her off her feet to become Reaching for her hand, swinging with her, sweeping her off her feet This wouldn’t change much since it’s not strict meter or rhyme, But might make the reading more natural. Just a friendly comment. Gloom |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Opal moonbeams, oooooh nice. great write Noah. floria |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
O love your tender writes....they are very peaceful to me.... Hugs... Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - your writings are most tender, and caring. A warm heart flows within you... BC |
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