Open Poetry #18 |
A Freestyle For Understanding |
GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? |
I cant understand how much it takes to commit to a woman, i tried 3 years ago and saw that i couldnt, i never dreamed of a site so terrible, a crazy lady with a mind thats too terrible, pinned down in the middle of aggression and lies, stapled to a wall covered with the element of suprise.. cloudy visions of the eyes can cause my demise.. never to be suprised by the look in her deadly eyes. staring into my thoughts to remember them time, devine concepts are met with darkness, repress the ignorance and stress that was compressed, never laid to rest is the feud of a lustful contest of pain and competition, comparison to the gladiators of their time and their warrior ambitions. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I understand this perfectly! I love the way you rhyme so beautifully, I feel every word of this poem. Women are hard to understand. So are men though. RP |
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GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? |
it was a freestyle to let the members know what kind of space i have been in for the past few weeks.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Antonio, this is so heartwrenching, it can be so difficult to understand the opposite sex sometimes! (sigh) It takes time, but I know dep down these questions will be answered with comfort! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Antonio, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds like you've been in a verytightspace, GW...welcome home! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"pinned down in the middle of aggression and lies, stapled to a wall covered with the element of suprise.." Sure doesn't sound like a very comfortable position. Does writing it out help you get yourself out of this spot? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
hey GhostWriter, this is great and the rhyme is terrific, all flowed beautifully. Loved the format too Maree |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nothing like a frustrating feeling...Well said... |
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GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? |
yeah it helps to write these things out.... but it also helps to have replies frm members like the ones here at passions.... |
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