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Satin Ribbon |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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If I had a heart shaped box on Valentine's Day I'd put you in. I'd give to you a special gift and wear your charm around my wrist. I'd wrap you in the prettiest paper and tie you up with satin ribbons. I'd leave for you some chocolate candy on the card I'd press my lips. I'd sprinkle glitter to add some sparkle with shiny sequins I'd adorn. I'd give to you my softest kiss to savor in the sweetness. I'd spray my perfumed pleasure so that you might breathe me in. Precarious is this secret gift tied in bows with satin ribbon. I'm rather fond of pretty paper a package that I can't resist. And when we kiss you taste of candy melting softly on my lips. Have no fear my darling dear some things I'm well aware. You've added charm onto my bracelet held tenderly by your clasp. I dare not place you in box or try to shape your heart for surely I would lose you, and that I can't afford. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-12-2002 10:48 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oooooh, this is lovely!! Great imagery and just so loving. Enjoyed so much tonight. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Love transcends time and space~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Ooh.....this was so special, Blues... I really loved reading it...could almost taste those chocolates. My younger son was born at the end of January and that year on Valentine's Day, my late first husband bought me a beautiful heart shaped box of chocolates. He didn't realize that I couldn't eat chocolate because I was breastfeeding. So, he and my older son sat and ate them all up, right in front of me.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - you write with such wisdom, and beauty. Love the words to this... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Blues, I really enjoyed this. I rather like the idea of an 'unwrapped' lover.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo cute and lovely, sweet friend, I'm sure just your sweetheart seeing you before his very eyes would be the most beautiful romantic suprise of all! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Sentimentally romantic, and very sweet! Beautifully done Blues. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lovely work ms romantic charming wicked in the under tone enjoyed it |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, What? No cuffs? Whew! Sweet poem. I like the images too. |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
This plays very well to the ear and you work your cadence and meter within the poem to make your final lines in each stanza have good impact. I really like this poem. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Nancy~ It is such a romantic time of year, and needless to say I'm in the mood for love. Thanks so much for reading. Madame C~ Thanks for the heart full of candy. You really are a sweetie! BC~ My wisdom has been a long time coming. If I don't like being boxed in how dare I try to do it to someone else. Thank you~ Midnitesun~ You are so funny, and you're right, it's what's inside that counts. To hell with the pretty paper! Noah~ Thank you for your sweet reply and for always sharing your love and light. Dulcinea~ I hope you and your sweetie have a happy Valentine's day. Thanks for your kind words. DS~ Wicked undertones? You must have me confused with someone else. Then again, It's good to be wicked! Thanks for the read big fella. Larry C~ I'm not into handcuffs, just whips and chains and satin ribbon, tied in double knots. You can even buy the extra wide ribbon and use it as a blindfold. Well, you asked for it Larry! Thanks~ Canuckster~ I'm truly flattered by your compliments. The rhyme and meter was purely coincidental. I need to take another look at this and see what I did right. Thank you very much! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-13-2002 01:06 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so silky and sweet. You wrote a perfect valentine poem. Sandra |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, A Valentines *bump* |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is so sweet, very very nice |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Sandra I was all dressed up with nowhere to go! Keep it up Larry!! I like being on top! LOL~ SEA~ At the time I was feeling sweet-er than normal. Thank you gal. |
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