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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Be Mine He waits, a chocolate heart held behind his back. she walks by briskly, ignoring the bum on the corner. © 2002 [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-12-2002 08:07 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Awwwwwww, this is both sweet and depressing at the same time, I feel so happy for her, but so sorry for the bum and hopes that someone will find him a happy home close to loves heart! (big hugggssssss) Sooooooo beautifully heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corrine, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is good...brought a chuckle...Come on.. maybe he isn't a bum after all....what flavor of chocolates?? |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
thanks, Noah and Magnus! Kind of a Valentine's trick! Cor |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I get something different from this...maybe my negativity shows through? This one struck my heart..part in anger..part in sadness...that so many people are ignored because of appearances or status in life. Am I making too much here? LOL! Maybe I'm just tired. As always, a very pointed truth you tell whether directly or subtley, Lady. Hope you're well, Cor! I miss ya! For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This poem packs a lesson with a punch. Your talent never ceases to amaze me. I was just thinking about one of your poems today...the one about the two lovers who go into the store to get out of the rain. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, That was a banana peel and I fell for it. lol Enjoyed. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this reminds me a little of W.C. Williams. . . that same way of taking a brief scene, and making it say so much. . . great job Cor. . . an excellent job. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Well, Jenn, yes it is meant to stir up emotions, to be a commentary about social status. You got it just right. Hoot_owl_rn - thank you so kindly, lady! You put a smile on my face, I haven't thought of that poem in a long time...Hmmm, might have to dig that up. Thanks, Sven! Cor |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
HAAHAHA made a turn around in just one sentence. good one. floriaFloria |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
such is the purpose of poetry...to put thoughts into thinking and i sadly have to muse about those who are not unfortunate enough to be able to walk into a store, buy a gift of love, and share it so easily. Happiness is elusive, but we often take for granted the wonderous blessings we have at home. Corinne, you have made an absolute statement with this! tSR |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Corinne! Short and to the point. It really packs a punch. |
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