Open Poetry #18 |
Another Letter To The Good Man |
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I wanted to write a second part...kind of like the husband's response (realistically...not all realization and apology) but this one came out. Enjoy! You always want to talk just when you see me pick up my pen. And you linger behind me in pace like a jailed cat waiting to swipe paws out to catch some inkling of what I am doing and I'm always impatient because you can't admit your curiosity. Perhaps you know I'm thinking then and you'd chance upon some spotlight that would shine on the single aspects of me that you seem to miss. I never could be patient when you stood just on the outskirts of me while I had my hand extended to allow you your rightful passage and now as you shuffle your too late feet in my doorway I'm not sure the opening is as big as it used to be. The welcome sign lights faded a long time ago so I turned them off to save energy because I gave up hope that you would return to the same rooms you said you wanted to spend our forever in. My voice, once strong and hopeful, has also faded. For no one was there in those rooms to help me talk and ponder and redecorate them with growth because you seemed to have forgotten that there were no doorknobs on the doors that you had the right to push so that they could swing open in welcome when questions and thoughts and musing arose from the daily life we tried to live. Now you pace behind me like a jailed cat as I try to pick up my weapon of song beneath your exasperating watch. perhaps like a cat anticipating the freedom of jailed prey. Would you catch me in hunger then or would you simply spit me out? I believe the latter but then my hope has wavered since my side no longer knows your true company. How else would a woman with weakened love behave? When will you, without fail, take courage and understand that it is you who has hidden me beneath this grave of words? When will you see that the darkness you put my openess in has caused me to forget how to see how to love how to even breathe in any kind of hope? When, Good Man, will you admit your part without needing to point out mine (which I have already realized)? Just some thoughts to ponder Growing in Regret Your Wife. For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
The best thing about this poem is the imagery that is displayed...very vivid...I love that...it offsets the lack of rhyme, which of course isn't needed to write a good poem, but is kind of expected when you begin reading you know? So anyway...I was really amazed at the images that this brought about...especially... “I'm not sure the opening is as big as it used to be. The welcome sign lights faded a long time ago so I turned them off to save energy because I gave up hope that you would return” & “When will you, without fail, take courage and understand that it is you who has hidden me beneath this grave of words? “ Good write... J~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow...seems you are a little bit miffed at someone...YES...I aways hate when someone is watching over my shoulder.and I am trying to write... Lots of words...lots of feelings |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is deep temptress, I actually read it twice, it takes two to tango. And it is difficult to balance everything out in a marriage, this is so very well expressed. floria Floria |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
This just took my breath away...such power in your words! I can strongly relate to your words here... Bravo dear Lady for penning my very thoughts! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Jennifer, I can feel such frustration and grief in these words, I hope everything is alright and you feel your love is strong with his! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, these re some wonderfully powerful thoughts! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done. . . much depth of feeling in these words. . . excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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