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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2002-02-12 01:30 AM

         The Doubting Valentine



Are you the blossom that I would pick
     had I the license
          to reach into this garden?

Are you the fragrance that I would inhale
     had I the courage
          to open this swelling bud?

Are you the watercolor that I would paint
     had I the vision
          to look beyond this scene?

Are you the melody that I would hear
     had I the strength
          to pluck this golden harp?

Am I the harmony that I would sing
     had I the voice
          to air this hidden score?

Are you the sweetness that I would savor
     had I the thirst
          to sample your fine wine?

Are you the pink flesh that I would devour
     had I the hunger
          to taste your fresh ripe fruit?

We are the symphony that we would write
     had we the timing
          to compose together.

We are the gifts that we would give
     had we the freedom
          to celebrate this day.





©  021202

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2002-02-12 08:28 AM

I feel this, its hard not to be able to be with the one you care for.
Sandra

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-02-12 11:02 AM

We are the symphony that we would write
had we the timing
to compose together

Krawdad...You write beautifully!

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

3 posted 2002-02-12 08:39 PM

   S
      W
         O
            O
                N
                   !
                      !
                         !

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-02-12 08:42 PM

(sigh) You are soooooooo romantic, sweet friend, your gorgeous words are always symphonies of true love and wisdom, this is gorgeous! (big hugggssssss) May love forever strum your heartstrings happily, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2002-02-12 08:46 PM

This is...one huge sigh!
Oh my, how I love this, and the presentation!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Love transcends time and space~

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

6 posted 2002-02-12 08:53 PM

What sweet longing you have written here. I love the style of this piece, as well as all it has to say. I was going to pick out a favourite stanza…but I love them all so much that I couldn’t.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

7 posted 2002-02-12 09:45 PM

Sadly beautiful! I enjoyed this very much sir. Longing lingers in every line.

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

8 posted 2002-02-13 07:13 AM

We are the symphony that we would write
     had we the timing
          to compose together.

We are the gifts that we would give
     had we the freedom
          to celebrate this day.
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very much love this...

well written my friend!
hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"it may be absurd..but dont be naive..even heros have the right to bleed" john ondrosic?

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2002-02-14 12:10 PM

Krawdad-
   This is so beautifully written.
   Such lovely thoughts from your pen.
   Much enjoyed.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2002-02-14 01:39 AM

And would the melody
enhance the lyrics?
and would the cadence
be as sublime
as these lines
you've just penned?

Very well written, Krawdad, and inspirational.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

11 posted 2002-02-14 01:53 AM

*sigh* flows into the heart and softens each beat to blend with the gentle music of your words...This is absolutely beautiful...I love it. **big hugs** HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

12 posted 2002-02-14 10:59 AM

yep! that's me!

hehe

happy valentines day, poet!

wonderful writing!

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