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Open Poetry #18

how much

Fee
Member

since 2000-08-07

Posts 381
Melbourne, Australia

0 posted 2002-02-11 09:40 PM

Just what does it take
Before you crumble and fall
When you feel that life
Has taken it all

Just how much
can your heart take
Before too much
Will cause it to break

Anguish and pain
Is whats left inside
When you feel
That there’s no place to hide

Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

0'.".'0 Just
((T)) Thinking
(..)(..) Of you
(```)_(```)

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

1 posted 2002-02-11 10:03 PM

Fee - Just a little pain and anguish is too much. Onto the poem, I liked the first two stanzas, but I feel that maybe you need another stanza to tie the last one in with the first two. Just a thought.

Dave

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-02-11 10:21 PM

(big hugggsssssss) So sad but well-said, sweet friend, life can indeed be anguishing at times, but deep down I know even just a little hope and faith can also be enough to end a heart back together as it breaks! (kiss on cheek) So sad but wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Fiona, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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