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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2002-02-10 07:57 AM

Whispers

I’ve whispered to the moon a thought
A residue of embers core
It’s something I have always sought
A coal still smoldering in store

It’s cloaked within the ashes rhyme
Beneath white beard and laurel head
Just waiting for that special time
A frog becomes a prince thought dead.

And she will seek me out to kiss
To pass lives breathe into my soul
To stir this heart to love and bliss
To flame that little bit of coal

A remnant of the apple tree
The seed of origins garden
The seed of love passed on to we
The very seed of Gods pardon

So be that Eve and kiss retrieve
It’s but a moment of naïve

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2002-02-10 08:11 AM

Seymour
You are getting better all the time. There are so many great lines in this that I can't begin to single them out.
Excellent writing my man!
Love that ending...sums it all up so well!

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-02-10 08:15 AM

Ethome,
I thought it did. LOL Thanks

Temptress

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3 posted 2002-02-10 08:46 AM

A most beautiful write, Sir.
You are feeding my addiction with a part of it too, yanno?
LOL! I think everyone around here has Moon Fever!

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

Martie

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4 posted 2002-02-10 09:48 AM

Sy--don't tell the moon
    gone to soon
    to bright of day
    away    away

Loved your poem!

strbbux
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5 posted 2002-02-10 09:50 AM

"And she will seek me out to kiss
To pass lives breathe into my soul
To stir this heart to love and bliss
To flame that little bit of coal"
Seymour how beautiful are your words.
Your rhythm is terrific. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2002-02-10 10:03 AM

I've whispered to the moon a thought
A residue of embers core
It's something I have always sought
A coal still smoldering in store

It's cloaked within the ashes rhyme
Beneath white beard and laurel head
Just waiting for that special time
A frog becomes a prince thought dead.

And she will seek me out to kiss
To pass lives breathe into my soul
======================================
The seed of love passed on to we
The very seed of Gods pardon

So be that Eve and kiss retrieve
It's but a moment of naïve
========================================
I've got the apples, got me chapstick(raspberry flavor)... meet me in Eden on the lilypad

Ethome is right...there are so many cool lines, images and metaphors its real hard to pick faves...no "ordinary" frog wrote this...must be a dragon-frog"
*winkiewinkie*

signed, Naive Eve *L*

peaches73533
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OK, USA

7 posted 2002-02-10 10:04 AM

Wow!This is wonderful.Thanks for shraing this.

Peaches

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2002-02-10 10:07 AM

*ww*

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2002-02-10 10:33 AM

Temptress

to help the moon fever.

Martie,
Love your comment.

Floria,
JUst for you

Dear niave Eve,
The lily pads it is.

winkiewinkie Randy Stinky.

Peaches,
Thank you sweet.

Marsha

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Maidstone Kent England

10 posted 2002-02-10 10:35 AM

Seymour darling boy absolutely first class writing, this is sooooooooo full of incredible lines. YOU are a fine writer darling boy, truly a superior frog.

And somewhere out there is your Eve

What can I say except this is utterly wonderful.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2002-02-10 10:40 AM

Dear Mushy,
Just for you.

Silver Streak
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12 posted 2002-02-10 11:31 AM

Rivet.

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

ecrivan
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my own state

13 posted 2002-02-10 11:39 AM

Croak..I'm a prince in morning clothes
croak..forgot my make-up and panty hose..lol

neat write Seymour croak, I mean write on

)

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

14 posted 2002-02-10 11:44 AM

(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, yep, it feels like there's a lot of moon flu going around, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

amusemi
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since 2001-12-08

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A State of Disarray

15 posted 2002-02-10 12:02 PM

A princely piece in my book! Heck with the Garden of Eden tho... this Eve wants to fish!

No, really, awesome work Sey!! Great everything!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

16 posted 2002-02-10 12:04 PM

Silver Streak,
Rivet back.

Ecrivan,
Rivet to the prince.

Noah,
And a rivet and croak to you.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

17 posted 2002-02-10 12:06 PM

Amusemi,
A big rivet for the awesome.

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

18 posted 2002-02-10 12:09 PM

This was charming in a magical sort of way.
Almost had a fairytale feel to it.
Simply beautiful.

Seymour Tabin
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Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

19 posted 2002-02-10 12:13 PM

Blue Serenade,
Rivet, rivet,

Thank you.

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-10-2002 12:14 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

20 posted 2002-02-10 07:40 PM

Oh...Sy...oh oh oh...thank you!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

21 posted 2002-02-10 08:42 PM

Sunshine,
Where have you been?

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

22 posted 2002-02-11 01:22 PM

Way to go Sy. I love it!

RosePetal

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South Florida

23 posted 2002-02-11 02:22 PM

your rhyming is perfect! Enjoyed the read Sy

Seymour Tabin
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24 posted 2002-02-11 03:34 PM

The way to say Interloper. thanks

Rose Petal,
Thank you sweet.

Sunshine

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25 posted 2002-02-11 03:49 PM

You ask where I've been?

I've been upon a petal asleep
where the shadows are wooded deep,
where all is night and crickets sing
I've been where the whippoorwills wing

I've been adrift upon moonbeam
and danced a cloud or two in dream
where Randy goes to play hide and seek
asking me to come take a peek

and where I was, there, you were not
and I missed those words I read a lot
where rhyme sublime is caught in time
making each moment a dubious crime

but now I'm home, where I should be
reading Sy's and other's sweet poetry!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-11-2002 03:50 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

26 posted 2002-02-11 10:02 PM

Sunshine,

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