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Jambalaya
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Jambalaya |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana 
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sautée my life to a hot fire rouge like hell i want to disembark don't know what happened end is the end Ernest where are you? loading your ego Driving to heaven on my purple horses ride on down another night out doing the thing o my God! fooling around on borrowed time gayly giving away y me Lord just another day oily molly unsatisfied red hand aunt nearly étouffé yes mam mating season asking for trouble giving away in a basket cake and baby asking where is my dad? laying in a gutter llama llama ama mamammia answer me caring for you loving you immersing you mojo and all boogie on up monique [This message has been edited by monique (02-13-2002 02:55 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, I admit, my head is not into mardi gras [at least not at the moment, although it would rather be!] but as I read this through three times, I hear a faint thumping of drums in the background, some jangling of beads, some chanting, and the smell of the bayou coming up on the wind... you definitely got my attention with this one! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Some great writing here with images to be discerned, at least for me! It's all codfish pie to me but I liked it so well....but what the hell up here in Canada it's 20 below zero today so I envy you! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I don't understand it but I kinda like like it  Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
This is good writing, I don't think I've ever read you before! I'll keep my eyes peeled for more of your work |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Ooohhhhhhh...I love it, I love it, this is one gumbo of a poem, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) May this celebration of love forever sing in your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Monique, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Well I must say that you got my attention being from Pineville, LA originally and being half cajun, "Jambalaya" was enough for me to read and comment, but what a...how should I say this...Remarkable...poem you have written here. Very unorthodox, very gutsy, all gittery and choppy, kind of confusing...as like Mardi Gras would be or life in New Orleans would be. Just kind of crazy...good write...I must say...good write. J~ |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
It is so good to be here again. I stopped visiting i have been dry as a bone. I wrote this last month, it was a game, someone just threw a few words on the screen. Originally i called it 7 words on the acrostic line, it was therapeutic to do. By some wild miracle i got to Passions in Poetry, decided to post my one fling of the year and after i read it a few time and being Mardi Gras the whole thing made me think of Jamming at the blues club on Thursday night in Baton Rouge and the word Jambalaya came one. Thank you all so much for your comments, and making me feel so welcome. I hope i can write again. In the mean time i am reading your poems. monique [This message has been edited by monique (02-13-2002 03:02 AM).] |
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