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Browning Lily |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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I see her grieving, Stormy tears misting over Her ravished countenance-- Her body is like a Lily, Browning, crumbling Beneath quivering waves Of early autumn moonlight... I see her there Under streams of willow leaves Yellowing in icy air-- Raging at the tranquillity Drifting, shivering Around the growing earth Allowed to see spring once more... I see her leaving Feet falling on snowflaked ground As she travels westward-- She becomes but a phantom, Fading, falling Past the pain of flesh And into velvet darkness. *Krista Knutson* |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Krista, this is so very sad and heartaching, my heart goes out to her and I pray very soon her heart will again bloom with spring and she will become lively and embrace her place in the sun with hope and love and a smile! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, you are a true angel to us all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krista, thank you for aharing!    May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alwye - like your poem, it's excellent... BC |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Beneath quivering waves Of early autumn moonlight..." I love these lines.... just gorgeous!!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You have some sad imagery in here, but it is very well written. I felt the presence of a lost soul wandering around, unable to find any peace or comfort. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey little faerie, (hope you don't mind me calling you that) your poem is fantastic, gives a sense of mystery and is filled with vivd imagery. I greatly enjoyed Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (02-09-2002 12:11 AM).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all for your kind comments, and no Maree, I don't mind at all.  *Krista Knutson* |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Such a sad poem, my dear. I love the images you weave here with such lines as "Under streams of willow leaves / Yellowing in icy air." This poem quickly brings to mind an elven maid, specifically, beaten by the world and fading away. The west has heavy connotations with me and I love how it was ued... I hope that's where my final destination is... Wonderful piece of writing, love "A hard, cold wisom is required for goodness to accomplish good. Goodness without wisdom always accomplishes evil" - Robert Heinlein |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
your writing gets more and more dynamic and this piece is a tremendous showing of your talent.... it is also very wonderful to see your beautiful face!!! one more thing.... are you watching me? lol great writing, my friend....... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Past the pain of flesh And into velvet darkness Beautiful ending to a hauntingly beautiful piece. Your writing is always a pleasure to read, krista. Very well done. michael |
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