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icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

0 posted 2002-02-08 07:30 PM

hypnotic,
a flame wavers
on a candle,
entices my mind
back in time
when you loved me...
Those shadows
danced on the walls
first time we kissed~
Dusted wings
of butterflies
teased the chambers
of my heart
Your eyes didn't close
and you, with smiles
told me you wished
to watch me while
I tasted your lips
and see my face
so you would know,
if ever
more kisses
would come...
And I thought
you were
hypnotic

© icequeen february 2002

...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes

Silver Streak
Member Elite

since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

1 posted 2002-02-08 07:33 PM

Beautifully written, icequeen.

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2002-02-08 07:34 PM

*sigh* so hypnotically romantic...I love the vision the candle cast in the vision of my eyes...Beautiful...I love it.**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-02-08 07:39 PM

Very nice, could just see the shadows from the candles flame. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2002-02-08 07:53 PM

definitely hypnotic, nice write

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

5 posted 2002-02-08 08:49 PM

Thank you all. You make a very rusty poet feel comfy here.

...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2002-02-08 09:18 PM

icequeen - tender are your words...

BC

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2002-02-08 09:21 PM

this made me smile....I like this very much

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2002-02-08 09:25 PM

icequeen--a memory in a candle flame..beautifully expressed!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-02-08 10:10 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, your lovely words always make me smile! (kiss on cheek) May you forever find joy and heaven in his eyes, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

10 posted 2002-02-08 10:35 PM

"Dusted wings
of butterflies
teased the chambers
of my heart" ----I loved that phrase. I also loved the rhythm and flow of this as well. Very well written poetry, I enjoyed the read!

*Krista Knutson*

"An eye for an eye only ends up making the whole world blind." -Gandhi

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2002-02-08 11:11 PM

"Dusted wings
of butterflies
teased the chambers
of my heart"

Wow, that is a really nice line!

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