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A Clean Sheet
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A Clean Sheet |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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On sheets of white Virgin, white and cool A child sleeps with his mother in comfort after nightmare fear of the dream awakens him in the dark he snuggles down On sheets of green Forest dreaming green A child sleeps with his mother In anticipation As the first day of school Approaches He jiggles around In restless crackle As he moves Closer to the warmth and comfort On black sheets sheets as dark as midnight A child sleeps with his mother In fear As the soldiers pass by the doorway guns blazing shivering into arms that enclose his fear and soothe it away On sheets of red As red as life blood A child sleeps with his mother Their bodies entwined As they sleep together In death for eternity. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
You can feel the closeness between the mother and child. But the thought of them both loosing their life makes me terribly sad. Nevertheless I love your poem. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh my gosh, this is soooooo heartbreaking, my heart goes out to both the mother and the child and the trauma the premonition brought! (BIG HUGGGSSSSS) This poem is sooooo heartaching, sweet friend, my face is flooding in tears right now! God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much, I have nothing more to say! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lynne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
After reading this I couldn't help but count my blessings. I also came away with the unsettling feeling that a Mother can not always protect her children from the harsh realities in life. You've told a sad tale and told it well. Thanks Kethry~ |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Kethry, What a downer. What a bummer. Well-written though. I liked the writing. Nan |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
There is nothing more precious than a mother and child. Thanks for reminding us. A beautiful poem, Kethry. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher [This message has been edited by Silver Streak (02-08-2002 07:37 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - this is a pretty heavy write. Wow, very strong words... BC |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Wow Keth, this write definitely took a turn I did not expect. I must say the images you used were very effective in describing the unwavering love that a mother has for her child. Very powerful and gripping write. Dave |
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rebekah33 Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 140MD/NJ |
What an amazing piece!!!!! I was wondering is the green sheet, a symbol for newness as in a new year of school? -R. "So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Kethry, I'm not very fond of a world like that! |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
The bond between mother and child is one that should not be broken.To see them both lose their lifes is a tragedy.A sad, but powerful write. Peaches |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Excellent writing Kethry and so true these days ... a tough pill to swallow |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow Keth! Powerful write. A very emotional and intense subject! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, You symbolicly covered all the bases, strong write enjoyed |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
And in the end they were back on white  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Kethry A very deep and sad piece, so powerfully written. I enjoyed reading Maree |
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