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Munda
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0 posted 2002-02-07 04:33 PM


Repost from Poetic Haven.


I Was The First! (Blank verse)

For many years I lived along a creek,
And navigated down-stream quite a bit,
To find a glimpse of what the end may bring --
A river wild that put a spell on me.

One day I packed my bags and got my boat,
Not beaver, nor a hunt this time my goal,
But merely satisfying needs within,
Exploring wildest river known to me.

What would be at the end of this wild beast?
Enormous lake where many rivers meet?
And banks much further than the eye can reach?
Or would it end at sea to mingle in?

So off I was and slept along the way,
And during night the deer and wolf stopped by;
Racoon stole food and ruined my supplies;
Misfortune could not stop me from my quest!

On berries blue and fish I stayed alive;
A rabbit old, occasionally snared;
My pipe, a good old friend and company,
While birds sang me a lullaby to sleep.

The river started flowing faster yet,
And danger lurked around each bend I sailed;
A rapid strong, or whirlpool to avoid,
But bit by bit I conquered every stream.

Although I must admit it was a fight,
With nature of a kind beyond my dreams;
Inferiority revealed to me,
By flowing faster on this river wild.

One day I heard a sound not known to me,
And for a single moment time stood still;
A mile ahead a waterfall so grand,
Of such a beauty I could hardly breathe.

I had to reach the shore to save my butt;
A test of utmost strength to man and boat;
My muscles aching, asking for relief,
Another 15 feet and I'd be safe.

The Indians would not allow me rest,
Their arrows aimed to kill this weary man;
My one chance of survival straight ahead,
By going over falls without an end.

Niagara Falls is where you'll find my bones;
A man's heart broken - story never told!
Another man got famous and not me!
Discovering these falls y'all come to see.

So now my bones lay at the bottom of
The greatest beauty one has ever seen;
My spirit bound till somebody believes,
I was the first discovering the Falls.

Dear folks, who read this story, set me free,
By throwing in a dime to break the spell;
For if you do, I may at last find peace;
Niagara Falls, lay not my soul to waste.

Munda



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1 posted 2002-02-07 05:13 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh my gosh, this is so sad but powerfully captivating, sweet friend, I hope that this isn't a metaphor of a recent experience of yours, for I believe wwe all struggle to find clear sailing from here and achieve peace-of-mind every now and then, but deep down, I believe we will all find joy and hope! (big hugggssssss) This is sooooooo wonderfully touching, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Munda, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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2 posted 2002-02-07 07:23 PM


That is one occassion where being first was not so wonderful! The adventure reminded me more of a Huck Finn story...well done.
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3 posted 2002-02-07 08:02 PM


This is so nicely done Munda, I went on the journey with you, and oh the rythm on this piece, great work. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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Bill Charles
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4 posted 2002-02-07 08:30 PM


Munda - lived near those falls for a while and they are spectacular. Like this poem that you wrote...

BC

Titia Geertman
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5 posted 2002-02-07 08:54 PM


Munda, this is great. All memories of the falls came back to me. We crossed border there when we moved to Canada some thirty years ago.

Titia

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Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-02-07 09:09 PM


Munda,
An interesting story, I enjoyed the read.

Nan
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7 posted 2002-02-09 09:14 AM


Blank Verse - Iambic Pentameter that doesn't rhyme... NICELY DONE, m'friend...
Munda
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8 posted 2002-02-11 10:09 AM


Well thanks everybody for taking the time to reply. This happens to be one of those imaginative stories that wrote itself - well sort of.
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