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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Another in the ramble series..... ~~~~~~~ If water were still If water were clearer Would you then see The reflection Of stones In the creek Painted by sand And lapping Ripples Or the mirror from which It flowed Serene images swimming In their flesh Melting through Iridescent cloud Structure, for a fraction Of time Laying amidst silence On the edge of reality I touch the water crying Wondering, if the sky opens Would I see myself? Could I notice that sometimes beauty Is the rain on my shoulders? Fear is naming love, Being scared to fall through Life learning Nothing, could it be that complex Or is it that simple? Somewhere between the clouds And mountains I’ve lost the hue That describes How ships sail the mighty ocean On their voyage Time becomes music Love becomes the dance Does this compel the mystery? Of the gentle slide Beneath his skin Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-05-2002 08:15 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - you do write your thoughts well. And I enjoy reading what you write... BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~Everything you pen has the same unique delicate touch to it that I really admire, and appreciate. Love this one...just as I do the others. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) You always have such beautiful thoughts to share, sweet friend, your Muse and ramblings always create such beauty and bliss! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
If this is ramble, the I wish that I could ramble this well. Lovely imagery, Lauren. *hugs*Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Lauren, your poetry is sweet honey on my bread of life. Thank you for sharing this beautiful treasure. ((Lauren)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
If this were water, then I would surely drink until I was full. Brilliant, thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Ah, that sneaky, slow slide under the skin 1derful! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I so love the way you weave your words so well that I see clearly the vision you paint and this one is stunning. I love it and could feel the gentleness of it. Well done. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Yes i like this one alot Lauren..lovely images woven from thought to thought ~Vic |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh Lauren you do have a way with words. beautiful poem. floria Floria |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Laying amidst silence On the edge of reality I touch the water crying Wondering, if the sky opens Would I see myself? Could I notice that sometimes beauty Is the rain on my shoulders? Fear is naming love, Being scared to fall through Life learning Nothing, could it be that complex Or is it that simple? Somewhere between the clouds And mountains I've lost the hue That describes How ships sail the mighty ocean On their voyage Time becomes music Love becomes the dance Does this compel the mystery? Of the gentle slide Beneath his skin ======================================= NOT rambles....pure poetry... no...better yet...to use your own words... Gentle slides...gentle glides. this is stunning in its imagery...and in its intend. more exquisiteness from your gifted pen You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, They are all right you know! And if this were water I'd like to take a swim. Beautiful. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Your rambles are beautiful Lauren. Miss your words. Hugs. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Such gently-flowing thoughts~ 'Could I notice that sometimes beauty Is the rain on my shoulders?' AND ... this little jewel-of-thought caught my eye~ Lovely where we find 'beauty'~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thanks for enjoying the ramble....I seem to be doing that a lot these days....Peace and hugs to all....  Lauren~ Step through the |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
A picture is suppose to be worth a thousand words ... yet your words are priceless to their pictures. You can ramble me anytime!! Hope you find your "hue". Peace |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, you always paint a beautiful picture...whether happy or sad/// |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Lauren, If this is rambling, I'm frightened of focus. Mike |
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