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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2002-01-04 11:17 AM



How best to show my love
Your desires must be fulfilled
Only you can hone my skills

As my fingers explore
Your sighs guide them
Your desires must be fulfilled

My lips brush upon your skin
The fires burn higher and hotter
Your sighs guide them

Exploring your topography
Peaks of hills and soft of valleys
The fires burn higher and hotter

Merging of mutual desires
Needing to know
Peaks of hills and soft of valleys

This love revels in the
Needing to know
How best to show my love
Only you can hone my skills

The challenge:  Dreamers Dream (Challenge)




Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

[This message has been edited by Interloper (01-04-2002 12:01 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-04 11:19 AM



This is wonderful!

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2 posted 2002-01-04 11:22 AM


*sigh* sensual perfection. I am lost in the sensations this poem gives. Stunning. I love it. I don't know how you did it but it sure is magnificent. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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3 posted 2002-01-04 11:49 AM


Ah, you have mastered it so well Interloper, and I thank you for rising to this challenge.  Indeed, it is not an easy one to do!  Hugs to you.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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4 posted 2002-01-04 12:06 PM


Sunshine ~
Thank you.

Startime ~
The Tall Texan once again melts into his boots with the sighs and hugs he receives

Gentle Spirit ~
I will have to admit it took no small effort
Thanks for the challenge and the education. I think I will try the "Villanelle" next and "rage, rage against the dying light."

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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5 posted 2002-01-04 12:08 PM


Enjoyed the texture of the words. Can't say I understand the form. It seems like Dreamer's example had 4 line stanzas and yours has two. Care to explain a terzonelle????

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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6 posted 2002-01-04 12:24 PM


InterLoper~
You simply blow me away with the sensuality of your thoughts~

'Exploring your topography
Peaks of hills and soft of valleys
The fires burn higher and hotter

Merging of mutual desires
Needing to know
Peaks of hills and soft of valleys'


*SIGHS* of 9.9 magnitude~
You just blew my 'Richter' right off the 'scale' ~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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7 posted 2002-01-04 02:35 PM


Virginia ~
You mihgt want to look at Dreamer again.  a Terzanelle is made up of 5 3-line stanzas and one 4 line stanza.  Neither meter nor rhyme is required.  the 1st and 3rd lines of the first stanza must make up the 3rd and 4th lines of the 6th stanza. the 2nd line of each stanza must make up the 3rd line of each succeeding stanza except the 5th stanza's 3nd line must make up the 2nd line of the 6th stanza.  Whew!  I hope I got that right.

Marge ~
On a 10 point richter scale you always score a 33 for me

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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8 posted 2002-01-04 08:58 PM




YAY!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo snesually romantic, may her love forever hone your skills of love as you show her heaven through the lovely words you write! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is soooooooo gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2002-01-04 09:54 PM


From one Texan to another (though I'm not very tall)::laughs::

This blew me away!!!! WOW!!!

Pepper
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   Percy Bysshe Shelley

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10 posted 2002-01-04 10:41 PM


Whew!!!  This is awesome!  Took my breath away...good job!
Hugs
Cindi

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11 posted 2002-01-04 10:45 PM


I am not familiar with this style, but love it I do and you did it wonderfully. floria
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12 posted 2002-01-04 11:02 PM


Now go open the door, and let some cool air flow over my mind and body. This is fantastic, a flowing form I've only seen once before, but hope to see again. And your poetry is so sensuallly delightful! BRAVO!
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13 posted 2002-01-07 03:28 PM


Oh, my!

Admiring you at Passions.

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with you
14 posted 2002-01-07 03:32 PM


wow....this is sooooooooooooo ummm I like this very much
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15 posted 2002-01-07 03:32 PM


Interloper,

     Now this is a good way to warm up a cold and snowy day Wonderfully sensual .. I liked.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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16 posted 2002-01-07 03:37 PM


......Oooooooh Myyyyyyyy!!!!!!!.........

~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~

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17 posted 2002-01-07 04:01 PM


Very sensual...very nice. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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18 posted 2002-01-07 05:07 PM


The beauty of your expression weaved in this terzanelle can hold a reader in gentle sighs all the while thru the read of this eloquent poem I for one see a gifted friend named Interloper this I must confess2u sweetie is truly superbly exquisite ...

Thanx4a terrific read PoetFriend
SmilesNhugs2u

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19 posted 2002-01-07 05:17 PM


Noah ~
Thanx.

Peppermint35 ~
*Sigh*

Cindi ~
Breathe deeply   Thanx for the wonderful reply!

Floria ~
I am quickly becoming a big fan of yours

Midnitesun ~
Be careful where you step.  No, I meant look out for thin ice this time...

BrightStar ~
Thank you for the read.

SEA ~
um, what?

Tara ~
Happy to help with keeping the heating bills down

Enchantress ~
Double *sigh*

Nightshade ~
Where HAVE you been?  Missed you around here!
Thanks for the read.  You're GR8!

Coco ~
You are an enigma wrapped in a riddle
Where are you hiding?  Come out to play more often ... PLEASE!?!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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20 posted 2008-06-22 02:22 AM


When I read poetry like this, I am inspired to try them too.  I have written a Terzanelle because I read them here.  Yours inspires me to try again and write another.

Alison

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