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. . . Needing to know you . . . Terzanelle
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. . . Needing to know you . . . Terzanelle |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
How best to show my love Your desires must be fulfilled Only you can hone my skills As my fingers explore Your sighs guide them Your desires must be fulfilled My lips brush upon your skin The fires burn higher and hotter Your sighs guide them Exploring your topography Peaks of hills and soft of valleys The fires burn higher and hotter Merging of mutual desires Needing to know Peaks of hills and soft of valleys This love revels in the Needing to know How best to show my love Only you can hone my skills The challenge: Dreamers Dream (Challenge) Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (01-04-2002 12:01 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is wonderful! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* sensual perfection. I am lost in the sensations this poem gives. Stunning. I love it. I don't know how you did it but it sure is magnificent. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ah, you have mastered it so well Interloper, and I thank you for rising to this challenge. Indeed, it is not an easy one to do! Hugs to you. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sunshine ~ Thank you. Startime ~ The Tall Texan once again melts into his boots with the sighs and hugs he receives  Gentle Spirit ~ I will have to admit it took no small effort Thanks for the challenge and the education. I think I will try the "Villanelle" next and "rage, rage against the dying light." Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Enjoyed the texture of the words. Can't say I understand the form. It seems like Dreamer's example had 4 line stanzas and yours has two. Care to explain a terzonelle???? Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InterLoper~ You simply blow me away with the sensuality of your thoughts~ 'Exploring your topography Peaks of hills and soft of valleys The fires burn higher and hotter Merging of mutual desires Needing to know Peaks of hills and soft of valleys' *SIGHS* of 9.9 magnitude~  You just blew my 'Richter' right off the 'scale' ~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Virginia ~ You mihgt want to look at Dreamer again. a Terzanelle is made up of 5 3-line stanzas and one 4 line stanza. Neither meter nor rhyme is required. the 1st and 3rd lines of the first stanza must make up the 3rd and 4th lines of the 6th stanza. the 2nd line of each stanza must make up the 3rd line of each succeeding stanza except the 5th stanza's 3nd line must make up the 2nd line of the 6th stanza. Whew! I hope I got that right. Marge ~ On a 10 point richter scale you always score a 33 for me Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
YAY!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo snesually romantic, may her love forever hone your skills of love as you show her heaven through the lovely words you write! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is soooooooo gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
From one Texan to another (though I'm not very tall)::laughs:: This blew me away!!!! WOW!!! Pepper |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Whew!!! This is awesome! Took my breath away...good job!  Hugs Cindi |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
I am not familiar with this style, but love it I do and you did it wonderfully. floria |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Now go open the door, and let some cool air flow over my mind and body. This is fantastic, a flowing form I've only seen once before, but hope to see again. And your poetry is so sensuallly delightful! BRAVO! |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
Oh, my! Admiring you at Passions. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow....this is sooooooooooooo ummm  I like this very much |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Interloper, Now this is a good way to warm up a cold and snowy day  Wonderfully sensual .. I liked.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
......Oooooooh Myyyyyyyy!!!!!!!......... ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very sensual...very nice. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
The beauty of your expression weaved in this terzanelle can hold a reader in gentle sighs all the while thru the read of this eloquent poem I for one see a gifted friend named Interloper this I must confess2u sweetie is truly superbly exquisite ... Thanx4a terrific read PoetFriend SmilesNhugs2u |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Noah ~ Thanx. Peppermint35 ~ *Sigh* Cindi ~ Breathe deeply Thanx for the wonderful reply!Floria ~ I am quickly becoming a big fan of yours Midnitesun ~ Be careful where you step. No, I meant look out for thin ice this time... BrightStar ~ Thank you for the read. SEA ~ um, what? Tara ~ Happy to help with keeping the heating bills down Enchantress ~ Double *sigh* Nightshade ~ Where HAVE you been? Missed you around here! Thanks for the read. You're GR8! Coco ~ You are an enigma wrapped in a riddle Where are you hiding? Come out to play more often ... PLEASE!?! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
When I read poetry like this, I am inspired to try them too. I have written a Terzanelle because I read them here. Yours inspires me to try again and write another. Alison |
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