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quietwaters
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since 2002-02-04
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delray beach, florida
0 posted 2002-02-05 12:46 PM



so i write silence on deep water
swirl my darkness with a finger
into the amber depths of a teacup
as if making a rite of it
was itself a passage into final
acceptance
for absent friends i could have
brought along with me to
this moment.
perhaps i would now
be less alone
certainly more forgiving, more
tolerant of the cruel swaths
that other people leave
leaving

so i write silence on deep water
leaving a telltale  
like an instant realization soon
gone...
seems only fitting that i leave
a track for others to forget me
by...
© Copyright 2002 Ree Joy Baldonado - All Rights Reserved
Saunni
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since 2000-07-11
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West Virginia
1 posted 2002-02-05 12:59 PM

Welcome! This is an awesome poem. Great write here. I love your name, I have a poem called Quiet Waters.

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us
Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2002-02-05 01:12 AM

quietwaters - welcome with this great write. I've not read yours before, but glad that I stopped by your place...

BC
peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
Texas, USA
3 posted 2002-02-05 01:36 AM

Welcome to this wonderful place.. and what a wonderful poem you've written here..

I'd say you've left a track already

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley
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4 posted 2002-02-05 01:43 AM

QuietWaters~
Lovely write~
Welcome to Passions circle of poets and friends~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20
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Pearl city Iowa
5 posted 2002-02-05 11:58 AM

Wonderful, atmospheric write with a feeling of deep contemplation, I enjoyed very much.

Regards,
Olias.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2002-02-05 02:32 PM


A very sad poem.  It's not everyone that will take time to ripple the water, but once the ripple is made, they are never forgotten...

looking forward to more!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2002-02-05 02:52 PM

Blew me away. I love everything about it.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
8 posted 2002-02-05 03:17 PM

Gosh I love this!!  This is one incredible write!
Enjoyed so much.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~
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9 posted 2002-02-05 03:20 PM

WElcome to Passions sweetie, I know you're going to love it here, this is the best place by far! Love it!

Joanna
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with you
10 posted 2002-02-05 06:06 PM

I can't pick a favorite line when I loved each one that much more....You write wonderfully. this is a keeper!
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In Your Poetic Mind
11 posted 2002-02-05 07:45 PM

QW~

In awe of this...WELCOME to Passions....I look forward to reading more...


Greeneyes~


Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-05-2002 07:46 PM).]
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