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RottenApples New Member
since 2002-01-31
Posts 9 |
Fade Away ---------- Ring the bells that time forgot Teach the lessons your father taught Turn your soul inside-out Light the flame and kill the doubt An ancient wind, too cold to feel It takes my soul, and starts to heal It wraps me up, and chills my mind All sickness, sadness, left behind This meadow light, a peachy glow Engulfs my spirit, from head to toe My heart warms up, begins to love My home's not here, it's up above An ocean blue, deep as could be The steady peace embraces me I'm in a place, relaxing blue It reminds me of my love for you And in the end, the flame burns out The cold is mild, warmth done without No more worry within me I'm happy now, my soul is free.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I'm so happy to hear you're happy, this is a marvelous first post!!! YAY!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet RottenApples, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!What an interesting poem to start your stay with us...I can see that reading your work will be something that I will always try to do...well done. Welcome to passions...**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RottenApples New Member
since 2002-01-31
Posts 9 |
I appreciate your comments, friends.. I have posted my work at other forums (I just started writing 2 days ago, and I wanted some critisizm).. and I can't seem to get any attention. It's great to hear what people think, and not be overlooked. Thank you both so much! |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Heavenly! And welcome!! |
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RottenApples New Member
since 2002-01-31
Posts 9 |
Thank you  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very neat... enjoyed..and welcome to passions! hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Heavenly First Post Here! I am sure you will love your new home! Looking forward to reading more of your work! ~Hugs, Nancy Lee~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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RottenApples New Member
since 2002-01-31
Posts 9 |
Yay! I love the comments! Thank you all so much! |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Yay, I'm so happy for you, this is a cool first post! welcome to Passions, I can't wait to read more from you! Joanna |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hello RottenApples... Welcome to Passion in Poetry..  Your work doesn't seem like that of a beginner. You have a good sense of meter and rhyme. We have several forums here, this being "Open" or the most active. This forums is one of "appreciating" others' posts. If you're looking for good critiques, then do take time to try our "Critical Analysis" forum. Our members there will be very happy to give you some valuable feedback. Check your email for a special greeting..  |
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RottenApples New Member
since 2002-01-31
Posts 9 |
Thank you for the enthusiasm and information. I'll be sure to check that section out. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I like everything about this poem and welcome to Passions.... Kathleen--(Kay) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions enjoy |
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mauddib Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 119melbourne australia |
Johnny come lately, did you bring your seeds, shall you plant an orchard or ignore the weeds. Not so rotten welcome, I enjoyed the read |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rotten apples? I think not! No rotten tomatoes, either! Welcome to Passions! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome! And from my perspective, bring on mosre of those "rotten apples." This is a very well written post, both in content and form. |
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RottenApples New Member
since 2002-01-31
Posts 9 |
Thank you all! I will be sure to post again, very soon. |
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