Open Poetry #18 |
Pieces |
vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I wondered why So many times In my life, Pieces of my heart, Pieces of a paper, As I sat down to write But It seems like my broken heart Wanted to write few words Of a memory That left my heart broken You will find pieces of my heart You will find pieces of a broken heart you will find so many songs has to be sung Pieces of my life That closed my door forever, But I know There Is sill time for me to understand why This would have happened To my heart So many days So many ways of my life To fix my heart In one, Pieces of my heart [This message has been edited by vandana (02-03-2002 10:39 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) There are many ways to mend a broken heart always, and as long as you believe in yourself and love yourself, your heart will rebuild and you will find the greatest happiness you could ever dream of! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a wonderful expression of both heartbreak and the vow of hope! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vandana, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I like the message and sorrow dripping from the lines, perhaps you might want to avoid though separating the but I on one line from the know on the next to match the beat of the rest of the poem?just a thought |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is very nice Vandana, I enjoyed reading it. floria Floria |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I know this feeling well...I have pieces of my heart laying all over the place...My heart goes out to you. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
A little glue A little paint A lot of time It's not too late You'll love again They always say Even when Love walks away Your pieces gather And then create A heart repaired A mosaic made!!! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
seems pieces of our hearts are sometimes easily written...and other times they seem so very scattered...eh? enjoyed..and enjoyed amusemi's little ditty in response too hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Work it all out as it comes out to you, write out how you feel, we are all here for you! Sad but lovely! Joanna |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Can I ever relate to this...As a boy and a young man...my heart broke too many times and I think there is still some of it out there waiting to be found again... Nicely done...enjoyed.. |
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