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Sleepy River - Bill Charles' Challenge
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Sleepy River - Bill Charles' Challenge |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Sleepy River Sleepy River in sleepy hollow Where dwells the lark and song of swallow By the river deer, stag and fawn Call me from awakening dawn See the river travel slowly Makes my heart find calm and lowly Ripples glisten in the sun Oh! Travel on unruffled one Lazy River about in winding Speaks in whispers never minding Burbles over stones in streams Soft of hope and song of dreams Soft the river dances lightly Over obstacles more sprightly Down to find the rushing sea Merging all to blend with thee River sighing near the levy Sweet scents the air of life's bold bevy Sleepy river flows on to sea Leaving calm and peace with me To the river slow in banking I will sing a song of thanking As it wends out to the brine It leaves slow dreams for all mankind Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown [This message has been edited by Kethry (02-04-2002 02:53 AM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A lot beauty in this one Keth! I'd say you've answered the challenge very well! Captured the river mood real well! Good writing! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
this was gorgeous kethry..love the rhythm too..nicely done.. hugss  ~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Beautifully done, Kethry, as always. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Ooohhhhhhhhh...this is sooooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your beautiful words are always soothing and lovely like the flowing of this stream! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Kethry...great imagery! Now I am going to have to go and find out what this challenge is about. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Beautiful imagery with a nice flow.Enjoyed! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling heart sister and holder of the stars light this is truly beautiful, okay you knew I’d say that because I’ve already told you what I think of this. You know I love it. It flows soooooooooo smoothly, literally a river of delight Absolutely divine writing darling heart, and you say my Sleepy River was perfection nooooo this is perfection, absolutely fabulous. I’m almost speechless I love it I love it I love it Sleepy river calls you hear it beckon on It whispers very softly listen to my song Come and sail the rapids float in starry night Yield to its song sail into moonlight Float down Sleepy River in dreamy peace Feel delight as all your troubles cease Melting into moonlight fading into dream Sail into wonder in Sleepy River’s stream   Love and warm stuff As always Slushy :kissTo give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am so very glad you are writing and posting again, Kethry...please don't leave us in a dry spell as before...your talent has grown too vast for that... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Kethry this is the most beautiful river I have ever seen, your words just flow..floria Floria |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome, I like anything to do with the outdoors, I choose picnics over formal dining, daisies over florist's cuts, rivers over the sounds of the city. *sigh* So this river write was easy. Victoria, I was pretending in this...pretending I was taking a lazy boat trip but now I am moist from the spray. Silver Streak, thanks... why don't you splash right in to this challenge. Noah, Well I have a natural affinity with water...some people would go so far as to say I'm all wet...And I promise not to mention Marsha's name here. Enchantress, I don't know if it was a formal challenge...however the basis is this write a pice using the images or form of a sleepy river ...so it could be a shaped piece which I'm too lazy to do or include the words in the title or... Marsha, you are sending me a waterfall of compliments and I'm already damp. *HuGS* Sunshine, if the truth is known...I left in a fit of pique. My writing never ceased, it only ceased to overwhelm me. strbbux, Thank you I tried to recreate the flow of a river. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I like what you did with this, Kethry, it DOES indeed flow...... Kathleen--(Kay) |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Cool, this challenge is cool, you did an awesome job, makes me wish I was having a canoe ride with my love! So sweet, love it! Joanna |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh yes...I love this one...it had the perfect feel to it...*sigh* I was lost in the calmness of each word...BRAVO!!!**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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