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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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HEAVY HEART So lyric is a garden’s song, poetic lullaby That brushes dust on petal’s gown and wing of butterfly The fragile rose unfolds its tender heart through poet’s pen Unleashing to the waiting eye, its beauty once again I cannot write a verse today, for sorrow fills my heart So difficult the words to find that truly would impart The grief that still remains within the depth of petal’s fold I cannot find the words to tell of sorrow that they hold A verse would not be adequate to paint the true and real My trembling hands unable to inscribe just how I feel Too pale are words to sketch a colored portrait of my days Too heavy is my heart to be the burden of a phrase Elizabeth Santos |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Elizabeth, I can feel your tears through your words, it's OK, we're all here for you! (sigh) Write out your tears if you must, for we are all here for you to help you, for you are a true angel and we all love you so so much! (kiss on cheek) Our hearts all cry out to you, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I don't have the words to say how much this moved me. Just don't have the words.... My perception of truth will somehow never quite be the same..and so I write. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
quote: To say this is wonderful is like saying light travels at a fair rate of speed.. this is fantastic Liz-- one of your best. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Aye, yes, there are those times that words just aren't enough, but the words you did put down, Liz, are a beauty to behold. Wish I had just a part of your gift...very gentle smile |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
You know elizabeth, i think you are absolutely correct. Words more often than not get me nowhere when I'm really trying to convey my deepest feelings. There almost just like little landmarks we place in this black void of uncertainty, not necessarily in the right place at all, but they can also be very beautiful, as this rhyme has been for me. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
library There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I cannot write a verse today, for sorrow fills my heart So difficult the words to find that truly would impart The grief that still remains within the depth of petal’s fold I cannot find the words to tell of sorrow that they hold Just a few days ago, I was telling someone how the things that effect me most deeply are the ones hardest to write about... whether sorrow and grief or excitement or joy... my words are at best a black pencil trying to depict a riot of color. But if anyone can capture emotion and convey feelings, it is you... and you have done so once again with this beauty. "Too heavy is my heart to be the burden of a phrase"... and yet you share this eloquent gift of heart. Beautiful! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is as close to a description as one could bear to read, and not fall apart in doing so. Do you remember the poem I did of you at your desk? I think it is time for a repeat, for this brought that image back to my mind so very well... yes, I think it's time to do that again... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So lyric is a garden’s song, poetic lullaby That brushes dust on petal’s gown and wing of butterfly The fragile rose unfolds its tender heart through poet’s pen Unleashing to the waiting eye, its beauty once again I cannot write a verse today, for sorrow fills my heart So difficult the words to find that truly would impart The grief that still remains within the depth of petal’s fold I cannot find the words to tell of sorrow that they hold ============================================= oh but you did find the words dear poetess... and they are sheer poetry in motion. Its become cliche' to say our words wont do justice..but mine cant touch the depth of expression or the impression this one makes on me. I will place this in my treasure chest...and share it with someone who adores your poetry. heart-hugs jm "Though my soul may sit in darkness, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Your words touch and move Liz. Even in sorrow your words touch. We are blessed to share you in poetry. Thank you. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And this is why I read your poems every day, as they are perfection dear lady, perfection. This is heart-wrenching, and goes right to the very core of internal pain. To feel this deeply takes a loving soul that will indeed see the light once more in their strength for survival and quest for peace of mind, body and heart. A hug for this hurting seems hardly enough, but know there are friends to hold you safe, and care. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (01-04-2002 11:28 PM).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
*tears* If someone didn't know what grief felt like before, they will after reading this exceptional piece of writing, Elizabeth. (((HUGS))) One of your best pieces, my friend. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It touched me deeply; those words seem totally and completely inadequate. Sending you a candle, Elizabeth.. Hugs, Pepper |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Liz: I have heard and know from experience, that when poetry is written, the words come from the heart. Your heart seems very heavy and I hope you feel better now that you have written your feelings down in poetry. Very nicely done. |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"The grief that still remains within the depth of petal’s fold I cannot find the words to tell of sorrow that they hold" -- I absolutely loved those lines, Elizabeth. Poignant and sad, I know the feeling when words are too feeble and weak to paint the picture of your pain. Sending love and friendship to you, I hope you are well. *Krista Knutson* |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Elizabeth, your words get into my very soul. You are so gifted. floria |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Liz, This has touched me deeply....You have wonderful lyric even when the feelings make it hard to write! big hugs to you! Cindi |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Liz, in sadness or not, the beauty of you always shines through in your words. I've heard so much wonderful about you that I hope to oneday get to meet you in person and give you the enormous hug this poem cries out to me to give you. Much love, hugs and prayers Ruth |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Liz, These words linger and haunt... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh gosh this poem touches the heart and says volumns to me......I do not write when I am down and if I do I get lost in words of fantasy rather then let myself and others see much of what I am feeling.....This poem tells how heavy the heart is better than any I could ever compose. Magnificent. **big hugs** My heart goes out to you, dear one. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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