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You......suggestions for a better title, perhaps?
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You......suggestions for a better title, perhaps? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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You  You're a door that's always open to my soul, you mirror the very depth which completes my breath, you see the best in me yet, you still love the less of me, you're a fantasy now real found in your arms of stars, surreal ~ We are rhapsody of harmony and, you, alone, hold the key to unlock that silken part of me in waltz upon my whimsy as you lay me down in ecstasy ~ You sparkle in drink of skin's champagne and still want for my lips, your kiss spreads my wings in butterfly of forever's dew to fly, fly away with you, faithfully, in sigh's renew ~ Thank you for loving me for choosing my heart to brush in blend, you're my kindred knight, my beloved friend and I fall into the lush of you at every dawn you are my Camelot, my Avalon... all I need is you, all I've ever desired...is you ~ Ours is an ancient bond of soul's refresh that swings upon the wind in mesh, you are my sky you are my sea you are the song inside of me into your eyes, I realize I capture fated prize in the cradle of cherish ~ All I need is you... you are my poetry By Melissa P. Monette [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (01-29-2002 10:44 PM).] |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Beautiful poem and artwork.  -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oooohhhhhhh...this is soooooooo rautiful, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! (smiles) May he forever be the Camelot of your dreams and life and bring happiness to your heart always of love! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet freind, this is breathtakingly beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
I know a good title you. oh wait hat was the titl-ok then it must be a good one and a good poem. J |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I am too enraptured to think of a good title for this poem....stunning. I love it...Such are the wonders of love and you have captured them perfectly. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Melissa, You have summed it up so eloquently with your one word title "You", Nice Work! Peace, Dennis :^) |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Very lovely poem and artwork!Very nice! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
"You" seems to be the perfect title for this beautiful poem Melissa. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
of you is perfect to capture your thoughts |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
you are my sky you are my sea you are the song inside of me If you could see my reaction and how your words effected me you would know just how very much I loved this....every word of it. It was like the sound of wind chimes in the breeze, or the waterfalls rushing in the distance, something you can't see yet you can hear it so clearly. Such sentimental words, I can't say enough. To hell with the title!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wouldn't change a thing, my Melybee... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you so much everyone! Well it's unanimous "You" is the final title I wasn't sure if it was flashy enough, but, it does suit my words and I thank you all for helping me decide~"Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
I wouldn't change a dot in this poem. It is wonderful. I love the sculpture with it. Such a lovely tribute, How can it be called anything but YOU ....great poem. floria Floria |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
missy, this is lovely |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Sweet Melissa; The title is perfect! this poem is perfect romantic poetry, and you are a perfection in writing it! Hugs, Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Melissa, this is wonderful. Beautiful and silky, I love the Camelot/Avalon line especially. Sandra |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Whats wrong with you ..... it works for me Write what you feel, feel what you wrtie. |
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