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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-01-28 02:54 PM

Soul sings
I'm a harp string
I'm a melody
in a music box.
A key turned,
I'm a heart's yearn
I'm a fever's burn
unlocking locks.

I can be anything
you'd like me to be.
I'll strike a pose,
if you'll wind the key.
Chimes in a charm
of chaste rhapsody,
dancing to music
of life's symphony...

A curtsey
of a bent string
I'm a harp singing
melody...
Key turns
as the tears burn
eternity...
in...a...music...box.

*inspired by a charming gift of a ceramic music box*

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-01-28 03:01 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, there's no sound that makes me happier than a music box! (kiss on cheek) May you forever be that ballerina that skips into eternity on that music box, and may your heart forever sing with that lovely song happily! We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

2 posted 2002-01-28 03:07 PM

i'm getting my girl a music box that sings music box dancer and you have sung it in your poemm...nice job

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2002-01-28 07:03 PM

Serenity~
Ahhhhhh .... one of my 'other' PASSIONS~
I collect music boxes ...
and you've captured the tunes to perfection~

Such *lovely* inspire~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

4 posted 2002-01-28 07:12 PM

oh wow this is exquisite, I love the way you've ended it! This is going in my library to enjoy again and again.

RP

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2002-01-28 07:16 PM

Soul sings
I'm a harp string
I'm a melody
in a music box.
A key turned,
I'm a heart's yearn
I'm a fever's burn
unlocking locks.

I can be anything
you'd like me to be.
I'll strike a pose,
if you'll wind the key.
Chimes in a charm
of chaste rhapsody,
dancing to music
of life's symphony...
=============================

From one gift...comes another...
yer so keeewl

love this me twin

I'm like a broken record that you can play ...
Repeating (as if it matters) ... everything I say.

Gin Blossoms

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

6 posted 2002-01-28 07:22 PM

What a wonderful gift to receive...almost magical....This poem is filled with just the kind of music one would expect from a music box...I love it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Silver Streak
Member Elite

since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

7 posted 2002-01-28 08:01 PM

A delightful, musical poem about a delightful musical gift. Loved it!

-newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

8 posted 2002-01-28 08:01 PM

Enjoyed!

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

9 posted 2002-01-28 08:10 PM

You never cease to amaze me - this is excellent writing...beautifully expressed with a touch of sadness at the end that really moved me ~ many I am sure can relate to this metaphor, I know I can. Maybe I'm wrong, but, I read this as a bittersweet perspective from the ballerina dancer in the musicbox (kinda like a jack in the box also)...she gets pleasure out of entertaining to the wonderful music, but, also feels like a trapped puppet who's alone with no chance of escape. Sorry for the ramble, but this really moved me!
This is a keeper

"key turns
as the tears burn
eternity
in...a...music...box"

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

10 posted 2002-01-29 01:51 AM

serenity - love music boxes and this writing. You write the words very well...

BC

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

11 posted 2002-01-29 01:57 AM

serenity,
Thank you for such a thoughtful write. I enjoyed immensely. Thanks.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2002-01-29 10:58 AM

Thanks to all, especially Melissa for the "ramble"--you got exactly my intent!

I was trying to use simpler language to convey that little tinkling sound...hope I succeeded! Love you all and thank you!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

13 posted 2002-01-30 02:37 PM

After all these fine comments I am daunted. So, I will just say this is FABULOUS!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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