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something for your fingers |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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it was our first time when you were there at the thrift shop looking for things for your fingers to play with like rings and thimbles you saw me with my jutting frets and erect demeanor and there was something about the dark of my hollow that made you point and say him too you polished me after with your hair and blew across me with your perfume your fingers were cool to my buttons when you unstrung me and undid my done beside your bed you pressed my neck to your chest and my frets to the sooth of your breast space your legs fit my indents as you wrapped them around me just before you reached down to your center you said I made you want something for your fingers... ©Dark |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark Stranger, its a cello right? Very well written, sensual and smooth like soft music. Write on Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Perhaps it is a guitar Either way, your music is beautiful Liz |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
A beautiful symphony of love and desire. It practically waltzes down the page with it’s rhythm of passion. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Kethry it could be a cello, had invisioned a fine classic gibson guitar, but when the strings are off, perhaps it doesn't matter..thank you so much Ms Santos, yes a guitar and a woman that strums with her soul, thank you for reading and responding Tracey, you bless me with your review and comments, thank you much |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS I can see her dark lashes curve against her cheek as she slowly closes her eyes and sitting thus she moves back and forth her pearls rolling across her silken bodice drenched by the lacey light and a shadowed guitar. Her mouth is a soft bow with lips slightly parted, her breathing fills another room where memory is singing and when her green eyes open they are filled with longing. ___ Your poem took me to the memory of a poem I wrote some time ago...hope you don't mind me placing part of it here. I love the curve of the instrament..it is sensual..as is your poem. |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Beautiful metaphore and picture. Hits just the right chord. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Martie...you bless me with your memory addition..and the lady there in your image is enchanting, thank you so much Canuckster... I appreciate your review and comments. So pleased that the image was worthy of your eyes. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Play me your gypsy guitar.... Lauren~ Step through the |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
wear my strum fingers there where your songs turn to sighs thank you Lauren |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"you said I made you want something for your fingers..." yes  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Soooooooo beautifully sensual, sweet friend, your words always shine with sheer passion and true loves magic! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark Stranger you are right it is a guitar. I was beguiled by these lines "your legs fit my indents as you wrapped them around me" Excellent write still. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Dark Stranger, I just love your writing. There are so many lines I could never choose just one Just wonderfully erotic with some romance *sighs* Did I mention I like this?Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Quite the image maker you are. Was wondering why you came up with the thrift shop of all places~ Stands to reason, some of the best deals are second hands. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (01-28-2002 06:15 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Kethry, upon return you bless me with second touch, I am aroused at the review please play this song often. Ms Tara, you whisper secrets to my ear eyes when you spend your time on my humble offerings.. MsBlues...do you fit my images to your smile do you wear them on your skin with wicked caution? Thank you and thank you all |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Gorgeous writing here..the strum of hidden music..it is there..for the right eyes to find. The right fingers perhaps. Sincerely, Regina |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* this poem sings sensual perfection....I saw a harp with its magical sounds that play so sweetly on the ear....BRAVO!!! This poem is magnificent...and I just love the sensual feel to it. **big hugs**  Play on, dear poet. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms wood, I thank you for your reviews, you bless me with the gift of your eyes ms startime, may my harp be heavenly when it strums dream songs for you |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Very sensual writing, and a beautiful metaphor of desire and passion. I have read several of your poems now, and find myself reading again. Your poetry is art. And I'm still learning to read! ~ Karen ~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
most humble thank to you ms Klassy |
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