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Misdirection : A Gloom Sonnet
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Misdirection : A Gloom Sonnet |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Beggars wallow in the gutters flowing Nowhere to be and nothing for growing, Ladies too rich and fat saunter on by, With nose in the air and looks to the sky. Tossing crust to birds while the starving cry. Children huddle in cold windy places, Chattering teeth rattle their small faces, Men of virtue will not give them a look, But build bon fires to destroy a book. Tossing on a book while the freezing cry. Money and great power building strong states, While the poor and hungry slowly just waits. Compassion has left the leaders of man As they build with a misdirected hand. Gloom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There ya go again, messing up this perfectly good pity party I was having--  .This is awesome. Great message and the form is fantastic. And I do agree! |
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EllenMoran Junior Member
since 2002-01-03
Posts 24 |
I love the choice to repeat "Tossing" here ... such a carefree, thoughtless action -- a perfect fit with those described, and re-examining the positive connotation we give those terms almost unthinkingly. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The truth of this builds as high as the fire. Thank you, Professor. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Excellent Professor.....excellent... ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Don't know this sonnet form.... but its so cool. Great write. Parker |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Great thoughts and writing! The poor are often overl;ooked in society, and we should be doing more to help them get off the streets. Show them a real life. Thank you Professor Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Aszard, this is soooooooo heartbreaking, I wish the more prosperous can lend a compassionate heart together to give all the people of the world a chance to live with health and comfort! (big hugggssssss) My heart goes out to all the needy, I join you in your prayers! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aszard, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Serenity, T’is a party I crash easily, Besides pity is a emotion which should be replaced by Concern. Thank you, EllenMoran, Part of the Style of a Gloom sonnet is those lines, Which are the same or almost the same as each other. This enables the pounding of the theme. Glad you liked it. Thank you, Sunshine, Your words in response are always pleasing. Thank you, Enchantress, For taking the time to read and respond. Thank you, Parker, This is a form I devised to suit my style and tone, Key to it is the two isolated lines, which stress the theme. Thank you, Hypnosis, Actually, they are the ones with the real lives, We should be helping them into our dreams. Thank you, Mistletoe Angel, Unfortunately, the haves tend to hold too tightly to their things, Stick to closely to their own ideas, and seldom even bother to look. May we all pray for those of need. Gloom |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Gloom, A sonnet to remember and use to redress wrongs. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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