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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-01-26 03:06 AM

Slow and steady
I've walked the line
careful not to fall away.

Pulled taut on a tightrope
caught up in the slack
bending as I sway.

Leaning towards the side
where reason has no meaning anymore
no longer do I fit into the measurements.

The dimensions of my love have fallen short
slow and steady, inch by inch
slipping quietly away......

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (01-26-2002 11:33 AM).]

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2002-01-26 04:29 AM

Good poem, but if I may... I believe taught should be spelled "taut"
Write on
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-01-26 10:21 AM

This is good, and once you make the change Kethry suggested, it will read much easier...

sodpossom
Senior Member

since 2001-06-15

Posts 723
N.C

3 posted 2002-01-26 10:25 AM

A very nice write!Smooth read.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2002-01-26 11:32 AM

I need to go find a hole to stick my head in.
Thanks!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2002-01-27 02:06 AM

it is beautiful

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2002-01-27 02:57 AM

Blues, LOL at the stick-my-head-in-a-hole reply. So were you taught to be taut? of not?
"Slow and steady
I've walked the line
careful not to fall away."
Hope that you find a way to go around that tightrope, at least 'tll you get your balance again. PS I love that new picture! You have a really great smile.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (01-27-2002 02:58 AM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2002-01-27 01:12 PM

Thank you for passing through.
I like that pen name of yours.

It's tight all right!  I'll get
around it somehow though.
Believe it or not I was taught right!!

Thanks for laughing with me Midnitesun.

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