Open Poetry #18 |
No More Equal |
DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
"Patience." That's what 'they' say. "Wait for love to come to you." "You can't hurry destiny." But the waiting is so hard ... it makes me want to pull out each and e v e r y hair on my head. And I'd offer the strands as a sacrifice if I thought Fate would take them, spinning the locks into a fragrant net to ensnare my lover, capturing him in my arms where he belongs. But no ... for now, he wanders the world, also searching for what his soul is longing, seeking out his heart's fulfillment, yearning for our bliss-to-come. If only a megaphone or a cellular would do the trick, or maybe I could hire the Enterprise, and beam him into my life. I grow impatient with each passing day, wondering if we'll ever be together. Please, Cupid ... can't I just flip the pages, skip the chapters, and turn to the ending where everything is revealed in its entirety? Don't keep me pouting ... Oh, I know it's cheating, like eating dessert first, but depriving my sweet tooth of pure sugar and trying to substitute all these packets of Equal that taste totally traitorous, only wanting to take a swim in my coffee, is an even bigger crime. ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
DarkAngel, this is awesome. I have a saying in my kitchen, It says " Eat dessert first, Life is too short" Now the part about pulling out your hair. Ouch...nice write. floria Floria "Alas for those that never sing, But die with all their music in them" (Oliver Wendell Holmes) [This message has been edited by strbbux (01-25-2002 05:44 PM).] |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Dark, I like this one. I like the way you arranged it and the word choices. The images are captivating. I know the feeling you're describing here, and you describe it well. Nan |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You have a sweet tooth for poetry!!!!! This made me think of when I was younger and thought NO ONE would ever want me and I would wait and wait and wait.....(sometimes I still wonder Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
DarkAngelChelle, you keep writing away those waiting hours and I will keep reading, that way we will both be happy. Good write Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Love the format very captivating! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Chelle...this is an amazing poem. I really liked the format....it heightened the emotions which you portrayed so very well. The trick to finding love is to quit looking and let it find you..........and......... then......it will! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
DarkAngelChelle, very nice poem. And I always thought that you should eat desert first. Isn't that the only way to know that you'll have room for it. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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