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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-01-25 01:51 PM

My mind wonders
through midnight’s hue,
In shades of red

A silent heart
inside the tower

Remember how
We climbed
across narrow
Darkness?
In a shadow of years
Down gravel lanes,

Of nights dancing
In natures meadow
Floating sky bound
With naked clouds

Emerald tranquility
Spilling from laughter
As innocence smiled
Across your lips

I sit in winter's cold
Softness
Reflecting falling rain
Again, I remain alone

Love and time
Become my poem

Could heaven
still love the

Fallen angel

~~~~~

Thoughts slide out of hiding and cling to anything I put in front of them. Words bead up like dew and in a moment, will be accessible to you.

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-25-2002 04:56 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-01-25 03:11 PM

(sigh) Oh Lauren, this feels so sad, yet sooooooo beautiful! (big hugggssssss) He will always be there to mend the wings of fallen angels and have them soar again with love and hope, may His hands reach to you always and have you embrace rapture and innocent laughter forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

2 posted 2002-01-25 03:14 PM

"Floating sky bound
With naked clouds" I love your lines here, I am thinking this to be bittersweet. A little sad yet you still have wonderful memories, and perhaps there is hope. I liked this. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

3 posted 2002-01-25 03:43 PM

Greeneyes,
I believe heaven loves the fallen angel more than any other, this is a sweet and sad poem.
Write on
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-01-25 08:33 PM

Of nights dancing
In natures meadow
Floating sky bound
With naked clouds

Emerald tranquility
Spilling from laughter
As innocence smiled
Across your lips

I sit in winter's cold
Softness
Reflecting falling rain
Again, I remain alone

Love and time
Become my poem

Could heaven
still love the

Fallen angel
=========================

You wrote this one in the clouds my dear....

and this line....

"Love and time
Become my poem"

YES .... exactly !!
and I am ever grateful I get to inhale their beauty.
So lovely Lauren.

I'm like a broken record that you can play ...
Repeating (as if it matters) ... everything I say.

Gin Blossoms

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

5 posted 2002-01-25 09:10 PM

wonderful!
as usual, your verse gives me chills.
-Dave

dawn to dusk
Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 68
Colorado

6 posted 2002-01-25 09:55 PM

Greeneyes,

This is very pretty. I enjoyed it! Nice work!!!

Noelle

"Hold fast to dreams, for is dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly" Langston Hughes

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2002-01-25 10:11 PM

*sigh* so beautiful...just remember heaven has a special love for fallen angels....**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-01-25 10:49 PM

Lauren, this one is as exquisite as all the rest I have read of yours...outstanding writing sweetie!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

9 posted 2002-01-26 12:53 PM

Lauren,
I could!

sodpossom
Senior Member

since 2001-06-15

Posts 723
N.C

10 posted 2002-01-26 03:03 PM

Very beautiful indeed!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2002-01-27 10:53 PM

JM took my favorite lines as well, and when they do become poems I am excited to read them for your words strung are like a song most often. Beautifully poignant Laura.

<font face="monotype corsiva">~* Carpe' Diem *~

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

12 posted 2002-01-27 11:11 PM

Simply beautiful, Lauren. I love the way you delicately weave your words.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

13 posted 2002-01-27 11:23 PM

I am kinda in a bad place right now, not really bad....more like a gray area, of life....so my words are stemming from that...i assure you time will pass, and time will heal....and I am so thankful for all the responses and kind comments....I felt writing and responding to poems would be more helpful then just leaving.....my time is sometimes limited....but I do appreciate you taking your time to read.....

Peace to all....

Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-27-2002 11:26 PM).]

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

14 posted 2002-01-27 11:27 PM

FANTASTIC POEM!!! So skillfully rendered, so effective. I LOVED THIS POEM!!!

***Ivy Rose

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